Countrymom, this is so beautiful and touching! I love your poems, and this one is just as GREAT! Thank you for sharing you thoughts and feelings with me trough your poems. Inner-Peace
WOW! This is one mighty poem! It's deep and, unfortunately, true. There are to MANY people in our world who are very much two-faced. I had a lot of problems with trusting others for this very reason. I am sorry for the pain, and possible distrust, this "friend" caused you to go through. In you description of this poem I know what you are referring to when you said "a female puppy". However, I feel that part should just simply say "a double-crossing person". Before I read this poem, I was expecting to see a poem about a real puppy that had turned its attention to another family member or something like that. LOL! Anyway, you have done a good job on writing your feelings about this subject! Keep on creating and writing! Always, Inner-Peace
This is a sweet poem! I think you can keep working with this piece in order to make it evolve and become a bigger, more defined piece of poetry. Keep working on the indepth feelings I see in this poem. It does have a wonderful potential to be WONDERFUL! Keep on writing and creating! Inner-Peace
You have done a beautiful job with this poem. I really like how you described the approach of Autumn! Since I have read yours, and a few other's, poems about Autumn, I never really seen Autumn in the same way as y'all, but you have opened my eyes to the poetic side of this season. I give you a round of applause for the beautiful job you've done with this poem. Pleasantly amazed, Inner-Peace
I love this poem! You have done a terrific job writing about the season changes and Mother Nature as well. It's amazing to me at times how the inner thoughts come out in a person's writings. I haven't thought about the beauty of the seasons until I read your's and other's poetry on the subject. Keep up the GREAT job your doing with your writing! Stay as creative as you are now. Always, Inner-Peace
Oh Terrie, this is such a beautifully written poem for your daughter! I love it very much! I bet your daughter was very touched by it also. I know how hard it is to have to let go of our children in order for them to have a life of adulthood and make their own way in life. I have three sons of my own, and I have had a bout with empty nest syndrome too! OUCH! I cried all the time. I commend you for writing this beautiful poem. However, I seen a few words that are spelled wrong and I don't want others to use that against you on your reviews. In your title, I know you intended Gown to be Grown. I also know you intended addored to be adored.And, the other word I seen was readly which should be readily.Please don't think I am picking on you because I'm not meaning to do so. Your my best friend and I love you, but I just wanted to let you know about these three words. Which, I would hope you would do the same for me. Especially sense I am the worlds worst at grammar when I get to writing so intently! Please keep up the terrific job your doing with your writing! Love from my heart to yours always, Joy
Hello, you done a good job on this short story. I can imagine how the character in your story feels. Through your words my own shy existance is brought back to memory. It's amazing how a person can relate to certain writings and be transported back to a time that he/she experienced the same feelings. Great job and keep writing and creating.Good luck in the poll! Inner-Peace
Hello, I think this is a cute story. I do see a few places that a word was misspelled, but just remember to use your spell check when you create an item. I use it even though I look the word up if I'm not sure because typos happen easily. I also see a few places where a word was left out that was needed. For example, the first sentence reads..I still have vivid memories what my mom told me. The sentence should read I still have vivid memories of what my mom told me. There are a couple of other places like that also. I know that sometimes I can go to writing so fast, I myself have left out such a word. Just take your time when your writing, or go back over the item and proof read it for these omissions. I really liked the item and think your doing well with it! Keep up the great job your doing with your writing! Always, Inner-Peace
WOW! That is an awesome poem! I have started one simuliar today. It's about someone betraying their friends friendship. Keep up the great writing! Inner-Peace
I just read your short story "The Naughty Gift" . It's so cute of a story! At first I thought a man was in the box but got surprised when it turned out to be a puppy! *smiles*. Two questions...where's the rest of it? Did they keep the pup? Always Inner-Peace
Truely awesome poem. I love roses and its beauty! I loved this poem because it not only talks about the beauty of the wild rose, but it's about how it was god that created all the beauty in his world! Beautiful job! Always Inner-Peace.
This a beautiful poem. If your dreams haven't already came true, I will keep on believing that God will bless you with a child you yearn so badly for! God bless you Shayne! Always Inner-Peace
This poem is one awesome poem! My heart aches for you. There are so many people in this world who have children and not want them. I will be praying for you! Always Inner_peace
Just TOTALLY SUPERB! Yes I cried as I'm sure many people are going to especially the ones who have been there. Beautiful job relaying the pain and agony this person felt! 5 Star piece of work!
WOW! This poem is deep. I myself have experienced the agony of being an introvert. I fought for many years to overcome this affliction. So, my hats off to you! Great job of relating this affliction to other people! Keep up the good work!
Dude I really love reading sentences others have added and added and added! LOL! So, I wanted to make a small donation towards your kitty so you can keep on thinking up more great exercises for all of us to spring into/off of, which ever. I'll also come by soon (tomorrow)and check out your port! Thanks bunches for posting this exercise! Inner-Peace
I really have enjoyed writing.com!! I had planned on getting on the internet and search for articles on short stories;however I stumbled onto writing.com.,and I have been at my computer all day. So, I just wanted to tell you guys that I just absolutely love it!!
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Since I have read yours, and a few other's, poems about Autumn, I never really seen Autumn in the same way as y'all, but you have opened my eyes to the poetic side of this season. I give you a round of applause for the beautiful job you've done with this poem. Pleasantly amazed, Inner-Peace