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Hello ,
I would like to welcome you to this wonderful site that is WDC. I hope it serves the purpose you seek and much more.
Suggestions:No real suggestions on this piece.
What I liked Most:I really like how you used raw emotions and so heart felt. Good way to express yourself
Summary:I hope to read more of your work. I wish you great success here in this great site, I find writing a very good form of expression.
I have a final suggestion for you. Find a group, there are many at this site and all serve a purpose. There are those that feed the intellect in you, others that give you great advice and new ideas for a new story or poem and still those others that are just for fun. Take your time, look around and choose the one that calls out to you. Have fun here, don't hesitate to call on me if I can ever be of help.
The definition of a review (in verb form) is to inspect, criticize, re-edit or check thoroughly. My intent is to give you my opinion, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Hello Omni,
Suggestions: It would have to be to write MORE of this type of poetry, it is hilarious!
What I liked Most: "There's a pill for you now that makes women yelp" I actually pictured that.
Summary:It is too funny, the things we come up with to write about at the oddest moments, I can't wait to read what else you come up with.
I absolutely love this poem for its beauty and hope. As a parent, of a daughter as well, I understoond every wish and thought you had in each line. It left me smiling Good luck to you with your darlin daughter and thanks so much for sharing this with us.
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Hello Joy is blessed,
Suggestions:No suggestions just applause!
What I liked Most:I love the message you write in your port explaining why things don't rhyme. Finally I find someone who gets what I have been thinking all this time. Well said. Poetry indeed is pure feeling put into words, I don't know who started the silly notion that it has to rhyme. I thank you for sticking to your guns! LOL
Summary:Great job in expressing yourself, I like your purity of heart, I can see it in your words.
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The definition of a review (in verb form) is to inspect, criticize, re-edit or check thoroughly. My intent is to give you my opinion, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Hello Hunter's Moon,
I am reviewing this for Challenge 7, would you please leave a message in the challenge forum that you have recieved my review? Thank you.
Suggestions: No reall suggestions, there is good flow and rhyme to the poem.
What I liked Most: Too late she realized these weren't the arms she sought.
"Who?" she cried
...and in the silence a cold voice whispered "Death."
This was a very cool ending and the rhyme just flowed so easy.
Summary:I really like the way your poem flows from begging to end, you leave no detail out. Great job and especially with the image used.
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The definition of a review (in verb form) is to inspect, criticize, re-edit or check thoroughly. My intent is to give you my opinion, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Hello mailboy23,
I would like to welcome you to this wonderful site that is WDC. I hope it serves the purpose you seek and much more.
Suggestions: I have just one and you may take it as just that, a suggestion. Perhaps the story would flow better if you seperated it into paragraphs, as I found myself going back to reread it to make sure I did not miss anything. Other than that, it a fine story.
What I liked Most: I like how you pulled me into to her world as she remembered a happier time with her mom and how you helped me understand a little as to why she was doing this to herself.
Summary:I see from your port that you have a very light and good attitude towards life and so this story surprised me LOL but I do like it. I can't wait to go back into your port and read more of your work. I also invite you to mine to have a read and maybe leave a review or two? Have a great day, be safe and happy writing to you.
I have a final suggestion for you. Find a group, there are many at this site and all serve a purpose. There are those that feed the intellect in you, others that give you great advice and new ideas for a new story or poem and still those others that are just for fun. Take your time, look around and choose the one that calls out to you. Have fun here, don't hesitate to call on me if I can ever be of help.
The definition of a review (in verb form) is to inspect, criticize, re-edit or check thoroughly. My intent is to give you my opinion, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Hello Elizabeth,
I would like to welcome you to this wonderful site that is WDC. I hope it serves the purpose you seek and much more.
Suggestions: My main suggestion to you, is to go back and edit your piece and change the rating to an 18+ as the language used is a big harsh, even for the 13 year olds that roam this site. Not changing it may cause you more trouble.
Second stanza, first sentence, did you mean to say "bombs and guns are your new toys?" you have an (s) after the word new.
What I liked Most: I like your stand on this, I can feel the hurt, pain and anger in your words. You have done a good job in using very little words to convey a big message, good job!
Summary:I like the poem, I like your honesty and can't wait to read more from you. Don't stop writing, there are no mistakes in taking your thoughts and putting them into poems, it helps the soul unload and it helps the mind grow. Have fun with it, this great site is here to help you and correct you on your path. Happy writing to you and be safe. I do invite you to my port and have a look at my work, maybe leave a review or two? Thnks.
I have a final suggestion for you. Find a group, there are many at this site and all serve a purpose. There are those that feed the intellect in you, others that give you great advice and new ideas for a new story or poem and still those others that are just for fun. Take your time, look around and choose the one that calls out to you. Have fun here, don't hesitate to call on me if I can ever be of help.
I want to thank you for writing this piece. It is very emotionally charged, I can tell by your words that the friendship you two share means very much, I hope every would have such a friend as you. I can relate to staying up late with worry, not being able to get something out of my thoughts. I like the ending, I hope it was indeed the solution to your friends problem. I look forward to reading more of your work. I hope you find a great group to join here in this great site that is WDC. Have fun and don't stop writing. Have a wonderful day.
The definition of a review (in verb form) is to inspect, criticize, re-edit or check thoroughly. My intent is to give you my opinion, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Hello man-daba,
I would like to welcome you to this wonderful site that is WDC. I hope it serves the purpose you seek and much more.
Suggestions:My only suggestion to you would be to maybe make your paragraphs shorter, a couple of them could be made into three.
What I liked Most:I like how brutally honest your story is. Your accounts of the world you lived in pulled me in and I felt like I was there in the room as you described everyone. I felt a pain and sorrow for the whole room, I felt the cold as you described walking around looking at the decorations.
Summary:I think you are off to a very good start. I for one, can not wait to see what else you have to share. Please do let me know when you do add and I will be glad to look at it.
I invite you to visit my port and read some of my work, let me know what you think. I wish you luck and have fun in this wonderful site that is WDC.
I have a final suggestion for you. Find a group, there are many at this site and all serve a purpose. There are those that feed the intellect in you, others that give you great advice and new ideas for a new story or poem and still those others that are just for fun. Take your time, look around and choose the one that calls out to you. Have fun here, don't hesitate to call on me if I can ever be of help.
I like your poem, funny yet true. I can see many relating to these words.
I have no suggestions really, it is written well.
My favorite part is how you relate the drinking to that of a child as he/she stumbles. Also how you say you don't have your mum and dad to look after you.
Summary is that you have a funny poem about true facts that happen to people. Have a great day, be safe and don't stop writing.
Thanks so much for sharing this story here with us. I truly enjoyed your version of it. It has touched my soul, how sad and miserable both characters are. You have an ability to allow me to see exactly as you explain what each of the characters is doing and feeling. I can see why, as you say, it has become a favorite of yours. I hope to soon read more of your work. Have a great day and don't stop writing.
The definition of a review (in verb form) is to inspect, criticize, re-edit or check thoroughly. My intent is to give you my opinion, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Hi SublimeRhyme, and welcome to WDC. This is one amazing site and a very friendly one at that. I to am new, here since late August. I hope you find your writing wings and soar high, just like in your dream, and speaking of;
Suggestions: Not many, in fact just two. First, in the first paragraph where you say "I would normally be terrified under these strangest circumstances," - I would either change the word strangest to strange or add (of) so it will read, under these strangest of circumstances.
Second, You have no need to place your name at the bottom of your work, every time you create a piece it add the information for you, this is why you fill in the blanks. You can go back to your piece, click on edit and simply delete it with ease. This is most helpfull if you want to keep your anonymity in place.
What I liked Most: I really enjoy the fact that you take me with you on your journey and can see as you follow the birds and wave to them, then as you are in the clouds and done on your crown. You caught my mind there and I like to read something that pulls my imagination into the story.
Summary:I say other than that, it is well done, good spelling, good use of grammar. I look forward to reading more of your works.
I invite you to my port to hopefully leave a review or two? Please let me know if ever I may do anything for you. I have one last suggestion, it would be to your advantage to find a group. You not only meet other fellow writers but you are left with so many new ideas for a new poem, short story or fantasy book. There are many so take your time and get a feel for what you like, some may speak to your intelect while others play on your passion and still others can be just for fun. I have a few suggestions, please look at my signature posts below my name and get an idea. Great luck and have fun.
The definition of a review (in verb form) is to inspect, criticize, re-edit or check thoroughly. My intent is to give you my opinion, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.
Suggestions:
Hi Charlotte, My suggestion to you on this is that maybe it would read better had you created as a short story and labeled it a letter to your past.
What I liked Most:
I really liked that you were so brutally honest in this piece, as a woman who has been through heart ache, I understood and felt most of what you mentioned here. It calls out to me, seeing a fellow sister in pain and knowing that only we have the power to allow, or not, the pain people cause us.
Summary:
All in all, I enjoyed the piece, it is interesting to view what forms of communication are used to express who you are and what you feel. I look forward to reading more, it seems you have a whole collection to choose from and therefore will likely see me again in here.
Hi cazzbie,
Thanks for sharing this story with us, it is very emotional and personal. My suggestion to you is that you form this story into paragraphs instead of leaving most of them by sentences, it would flow better. I hope to soon read more of your great experiences, until then, keep writing and good luck to you.
Welcome to WDC, I hope you enjoy your time here and learn lots. I really liked your piece. I encourage you to join groups and meet other interesting people here. Good luck with your works and have fun. May I suggest you use your BIO to express your wants and desires from this site, tell us about yourself and what your genre is, etc. It will allow us, the readers, to know more about you.
Welcome to WDC. I liked your letter. I know this type of letter as I have written many like it in my youth. It is the best form of release. You feel bette after letting all that emotion out, don't you? It feels good to release all that negativity. Congratulations on doing so. I could feel your emotions in every word and it showed how affected you are by it, if it is a real experience then you shoudl be better for it, if it is just a story, then you have a good immagination.
My suggestion to you is to find a group to be a part of and to make new friends. Also, it would be great if you added your BIO, tell us about yourself, what you like and would want from this site. There is much to do and see here at WDC. I myself am addicted and love it here Please let me know if I can be of any assistance in your journey, I too am new to the site, people here are very friendly and very helpful, there are no wrong questions.
I invite you to visit my port and leave a review. Have a wonderful day and Happy Writing.
I liked your pieces, very intereseting and quiet a combination. I wish you luck here and I hope it leads you to more and better writing. I suggest you join a group, they will be your companions and your cheering squad when you need. There is much to do and see, take your time and try everything at least once. LOL
I invite you to view my port and hopefuly leave a review?
This was a strong piece, it really touches my heart to read about this subject having gone through it myself. I commend you for writing about it with such grace. You could have gone the otherway, but stayed strong. Thanks for sharing with us.
I like your pose. What you say is very true, especially the part that says that maybe those that can control it are not feeling the real thing. Love, in my eyes, outshines anything and can not help but stand out. It practically yells out for attention. I hope you are finding your way around WDC with no problems. If ever you want to ask anything or just invite to have your work reviewed, I will be here. Have a wonderful day and Happy Writing to you.
Hi shygirl and welcome to WDC! This is an awesome place to be and share your work. I really liked your poem, you are very clear on how you feel, and what girl does not understand or remember their first crush. I wish you luck with your future works, hope to see you around. I invite you to my port and please leave a review.
Also, may I suggest joining a group, there are many I know, just look for that calls out to you. Warning though, it is hard to belong to only one Please let me know if I can ever be of any help to you.
This was a good story and a great example of how life works at times. I like the way your story moved and how you made the characters pop, I could envision both of them just as you explained. I wonder to, was this a real experience? LOL I hope you are finding your way around WDC with no problems, I can't wait to read more of your work. Have a great day and Happy Writing.
Hello and welcome to WDC. I hope you love it here as much as we do. Please remember that any and all reviews you recieve are only meant in the spirit of helping your work.
I really enjoyed your piece, it is a very strong yet gentle message to the reader about God's love and the wonderful creations we were given.
Have a wonderful day. I suggest you visit the Groups section of the site, there you can find others who are in your same genre and will give you encouragement, but then again WDC is nothing but. Happy Writing to you.
Well, I did as I promised and allowed my daughter to read these few chapters.
Allow me to quote " Mom, you have to ask her when she is coming out with more, this book is super good, tell her I think it is brilliant" ( me thinks she likes it?) LOL!!!
I do hope to learn more about your writing and when your work is in print, we shall be one of your followers. LOL Have a great day.
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