I really like this! The flow was consistent from beginning to end, and it really pulled me in. Your word choice was creative and appropriate, and I feel like everything just fits. No criticism on this at all.
Awesome poem! I love how you expressed the image in such a way that the reader is able to feel and see the ocean. The only criticism I will share with you is that the first stanza rhymed perfectly, and the last two didn't. Poetry doesn't have to rhyme. I just personally feel that the rhythm stays the same when you choose to go one way or the other. Anyways, loved reading this poem. Keep up the good work!
I just wanted to share with you that I like what you did here. It's a good poem overall. It is short and to the point, but you were able to express so much intense emotion in a short piece of work. Good job!
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