I like the flow of this poem. I am glad that I was able to see the sequel first. Your emotion over the disappearance is well stated in your poem. Poetry is a good outlet for great emotional feelings. I would like to see some punctuation added to control the flow of the poem for the reader.
What a good topic to write about. I enjoyed reading this selection. You strayed from your rhyme pattern in a couple of places and I noticed the rhythm was a bit different on the line "Your increases make my cup full". In spite of this, I have to rate your poem highly because of the good flow.
I really like the imagry you used in your ballad. I liked the repetition of the lines "He rode, he rode." and "Rode he, rode he." It emphasized the long distance ridden and the emotional state of the rider on a difficult mission. I had a little trouble with the changes in rhythm in the different stanzas. I would like to have seen the same rhythm pattern in all of the stanzas. You used some very good vocabulary in the poem and it was a good read.
I really enjoyed this short story. The characters were consistant and clearly delineated. You included the conflict between Darla and Abby which adds to the interest in the story. It also had a dash of the Hero in Neil. Thanks again for some interesting (and wholesome) writing from which to select. I remain "one of your biggest fans."
Good example of writing about a slice of life. I too have a 5 and a 4 generation picture in my family and you have captured the feelings very well.
I particularly like the lines ...."with love and pride to my/great and greater-grandsons unknown." and the way you italicized the "and their sons" just above that. You also brought a smile to me with the last two lines. Isn't it the truth. Then again, considering the historical value of such a picture, it becomes priceless. Good writing.
Very good poem that shows the universal emotion of one who is seeking reassurance from God. We all are there sometime. I enjoyed the poem. You have used a few words to get your message across. The rhythm of the poem flows well. Keep up the good work.
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