This is a beautiful poem about looking at the universe.
It seems to be a free verse poem, if I'm not mistaken.
The way you've worded the whole poem can make me imagine the night sky as a giant curtain, with each star painted on that curtain with its own unique pattern, and me leaping through the sky, swiping at clouds and flying every time I bounce from a cloud.
And when you can do something like that to the reader, you've made a poem worth reading.
This is a beautiful story of the drive to Grandma's house.
You write like a writer.
You're a natural.
But of course, with every good writer, there's bound to be a mistake.
When you mention the pine trees and evergreens, lowercase the p and t in 'Pine Trees' and the e in 'Evergreens'.
This has the feeling of being told from a seventeen or eighteen year old grandchild, but the question is, is the character male or female?
Though there is a part that confuses the reader.
The line 'You think with a smile on your lips' might make the reader think that they are the character driving to Grandma's, but in the details, it says that this story is from experience.
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