It is a nice prayer. The connection your attempting to make a brave one. Between America and God. Your trying to express the space between the two as discretely as posible. At the same time you are walking us through a dialogue - man with God. It is really good. The rhythm and the beat of it go well with it. In opinion, this a piece that could go on forever and forever and forever.
I love the rhyme and rhythm. The subject matter is just what someone like me is looking for. A way through England without having to go to England. The description of the seasons is phenomenal. With a limited amount of words you paint a picture. You dont use too many brush strokes, you leave a certain amount of the work up to the reader. To piece it together it should be a back and forth game between the writer and the reader.
There are some A that you dont need in first sentence. I like the fact that you are brave enough, and sensible enough, to take the "emotions" road. I believe that to be the most important one that not many follow. The paragraph describing what worked for you is also pleasant. It tells that you appreciate that fact that the author, be it who it may, was successful to a point. Great job if you ask me. It is a swell submission.
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