THis was a very interesting story, but between the caps, and little punctuation or incorrect punctuation, it was very hard to read. It seemed like a story one would ramble out when speaking to someone else.. It seemed to drag in parts with unneeded information also, but the story was a very interesting one and the only reason I kept trying to decipher the writing.
In the 6th paragraph you forgot " " around what was being said and Jamie's feelings about being called James. It was a little confusing. Other than that, I thought it was a really good piece. You certainly grab at the emotions. I really enjoyed reading it.
This is a good little piece, but there seems to be a need for something more. When I got to the end I was left wondering, this is all? I know it's part of a bigger work, but this piece just left me wanting.
I enjoyed this immensely. It's a very interesting look at all the stories. You had my attention the whole way through, and like with any good story, when I came to the end, I was only disappointed there wasn't more. Excellent job!!!
This is a very interesting story. I couldn't stop reading. It was hard to read though because of no seperation of dialogue from the rest of the story, and because you split the dialogue up that one character spoke. I really enjoyed this story though!
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