Hello *Jenny*

Review of "Explore" 

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General Comments and Emotional Impact

The poem is about children, growing up and change. I'm the youngest in my family and even today my siblings and my parents sometimes treat me like I'm a child and I feel that it's always going to be like that. As mentioned in this poem, the love and care for the child can only be expressed by worrying about them or making sure that they are not in harms way. But this can mean when they grow up and want to go explore the world it will be very hard for the loved ones. Well written.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern of the form a,b,a,b and it works well with the flow of the poem.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
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Hello Rainbowapple

Review of "Destiny of a Disability" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact
The most inspiring and encouraging writing I've read in quite some time. The choice of the title matches perfectly with what is written in the article. The words written speak of someone who has overcome great struggles and has not only accepted it but accomplished much through it. People don't talk of disability as a gift, but here you write about how it has actually shaped your destiny, made you see the world in a different view. And you didn't stop there, you have now encouraged and touched the lives of many more people through your public talks and also inspired me by writing this wonderful account of your life.

Overall

I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

Hello Tracy63

Review of " Handicapped" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

The poem is written from the point of view of a handicapped person. Reading the poem makes me realize the things we take for granted so very often. The fact that every human being has to be treated with the same love, care and friendship that they deserve despite their disabilities. The poem follows a rhyme scheme of a,b,a in all but the last stanza. Most often people tend to serve and help people with disabilities and this can become more of a chore. However, though helping them is important what is really essential is being there for them as a friend, to love and care for them without any biases.

My Favourite Lines

" Is your heart lame and/or blind?"

Truly thought provoking line indeed. Sometime our hearts do go blind or lame to not actually see others for the wonderful people they are.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

Hello MasterDragon

Review of "Honor" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

The article is about honor and what it means to the author in particular. It is true that when people talk about honor each of us have a different definition about it and most of the time it only speaks about one of the qualities of honor, like trust or honesty, but honor is something more that just a quality that comes and goes but something that stands the test of time, as you have written here. There is a bit of confusion in the sixth paragraph, you say we cannot make anyone else honorable, true and that each of us are responsible for our own, but I say that "Others are not important in the end". And considering others more important than yourself is a true quality of an honorable person. Reading this, I've come to see honor as more of a character or change of heart rather than a list of rules or duties to follow, but without humility and self sacrifice I don't think a person can be truly honorable.

Overall

An interesting read so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
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Review of "Stand and Deliver: A Tribute to Teachers" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

The essay is about honoring teachers for their sacrificial service as they not only provide education but also help nurture and grow children who then become leaders and role models of the future. The underlying motivation as mentioned in this essay is the joy that teachers have when they see inquisitive minds and have this natural or heartfelt responsibility to mold those minds and hearts for a better future. I agree with you, that teaching is one of the noblest professions, and they do play a major role in shaping the future of any young student. Personally, I have always felt interested in a subject if I liked the teacher and it was usually the ones who were kind and whose classes were fun and innovative to be in. Today, I teach part time and whenever I interact with students who come up with bizarre questions or theories for explaining stuff, I'm amazed at how much I learn from being around them, and that's mostly why I love teaching despite the amount of time it takes for preparation and the bundles of marking afterwards. Though underpaid, I'm sure they get their reward every time they hear about their students who are role models of successful careers, selfless service and honest character.

Title and description

The title is very catchy and that along with the description if what lead me to read your work and I'm glad I did.

Suggestions and mistakes

I could not find any mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar.

My Favourite Part

"They teach the lessons of life."

Teachers definitely do shape the future of our community and nation, even though it may be just one student at a time.

Overall

I enjoyed reading this wonderful essay and I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
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Hello SWPoet

Review of "Distraction" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

The poem talks about distractions and how they never seem to come to us when we really need them but creep on us when at work. Oh it is almost as if we want to be distracted and not do our work, I think that is the problem. If we really did want to do our work and enjoyed it we won't be distracted unless there was a bigger problem that is taking up the space in the minds. And sometimes just a little day dreaming and distraction might help to get the job done too.
Thought provoking poem. Well written.

Thanks for sharing your work.
Keep writing.

~Princess Zelda
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Hello drifter

Review of "The Power of Prayer" 

Amen! It is amazing to hear true stories of miracles like this, I thank you so much for sharing this with the world. It is truly good that you are a testimony to the healing power of Jesus and also the power of prayer. And yes, sometimes when God tells us to do things we just need to do it in faith and we will always see His miraculous ways. Once again, thank you for sharing this.


~Princess Zelda
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Hello Sharon

Review of "The Book" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

The poem talks about The Book, which to me I believe is the Bible. It is so true that in sad moments how much one verse can encourage and change your sadness to happiness. But like you said, the words may seem vague and also doesn't seem to give a clear indication of what one's purpose in life is. I think if we only turn to The Book as a helping guide in times of trouble we may not be getting the full meaning of it, but I don't read it very often too and when trouble comes I scramble for something from the verses to give my hope and joy.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern of the form a,b,c,b and it works well with the flow of the poem.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting and intriguing and that is what brought me to read this poem in the first place.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines

"read them with an open heart,
the meaning will ring true."
This is so very true, sometimes we read, see and hear only thing the way we want them to be but when we see them with a new perspective, the words will be truly meaningful.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
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Hello MichelleP

Review of "Sadness" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

Beautiful, simple and yet profound truth about the feeling called sadness. You have not only explained the feeling and what it does but also given a solution to cure sadness. Most people just sit and wallow in misery instead of letting it all out and going through the healing process. But as you wrote here, the only way to happiness and peace is through letting the sadness out in creative ways.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern of the form a,b,c,b and it works well with the flow of the poem.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
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Hello ArtCrusade

Review of "when the rain pours.." 

This is review on behalf of the RAOK monthly review challenge!

General Comments and Emotional Impact

First of, I have to say that I love rain and its magical properties. Your poem has captured one of those moments we all have to experience in life. The emotion that arises as the person in the rain happens to be in tears, I assume is because he/she is very happy. I come to this conclusion as the person seems to enjoy the rain and begins to dance and spin. Rain has its way of washing away our cares and worries and your poem depicts that quality very well. The imagery and pictures that come to mind while reading this is very good, meaning your words evoke memories and create moments.
I like the ending and good use of alliteration in it. Well written.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
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Review of "Deep Blue Sea" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A beautiful poem about the faithfulness of God. Surely He is faithful to us even when we are messed up and unworthy He cares for us like no one else can.I am able to relate to this and say that through it all He has always been there right by my side too. I have just one suggestion to make, since you are talking about God and you have addressed Him as 'You', I suggest you use uppercase letters for the beginning of each you. There are no mistakes in spelling. Well written.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
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Hello express

Review of "Oh No! What Do I Do?" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A poem about your life's journey. You have used simple words to bring out the story in your poem. You could used emotions and brought out what you felt like in these situations, that would have added more essence to the poem. There are mistakes in grammar or punctuation that can be found. Well written.

Overall

A good poem so I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
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Hello Ellie Maynard Bryerton

Review of "The Fire Inside" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A poem about the fire that each of us have within us. It is true that we have this potential within and just like a fire, it can be used for good and it and also bring destruction. Some days we feel so alive with the fire raging within us but some days we feel negative and quietened. Your poem is very thought provoking. I can't seem to find any errors in grammar or punctuation. Well written.

Overall

A good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
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Hello StarGazer

Review of "Flying from Fear (revised)" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

I am reviewing this item for the challenge presented by Diane

A nice short story about a butterfly named Charlie and his fear of flying. I like how at first it is very difficult to find that you are talking about a butterfly and not a human. You slowly reveal that you are talking about a butterfly. The fear he has is real and how he overcomes the fear is by the wonder, taste and smell of flowers and honey.
In the second paragraph,first line, you can put a comma after 'the others' to make the line flow better. Well written.

Overall

I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
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Hello ~WhoMe???~

Review of "Safe 4th Of July For All" 

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General Comments and Emotional Impact

A true and caring poem about the precautions and caution that needs to be taken when handling fireworks during the fourth of July celebrations. I remember as I little girl I used it when it time for the celebrations because I was scared of the confusion and noise. I have grown up to get used to it but wouldn't get involved in it. I like how you tell the other side of the story where there are people who suffer because of our celebrations. We need to give heed to them and be cautious too.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern the poem of the a,b,c,b and this works well with the rhythm and the flow of the poem.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines

"Terrified and confused
Running away to escape the fright
Sometimes even injured
Trying to escape the bright light"

The truth we fail to see...

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
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Hello Andy

Review of "Idle Hands" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A thought provoking poem about idle hands. I have to say reading at this time is very appropriate for me, because I've been slacking a bit in a lot of things and even though I wanted to do, i still couldn't get anything started. However, when someone inspires you or rather challenges you, you do things quickly and efficiently. At least that is what I do. I would like to say that this is true not only for idle hands, but also the mind. It can collect with unwanted fears and regrets and crazy stuff if not filled with the right stuff. Like I said, thought provoking. Hopefully you'll never have idle hands and always be an artist and a poet. Well written.


Overall

I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda
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Review of "A Poem for a Poet" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A nice poem about trying to write a poem and the things that keep happening around the poet during that time. I like how you explored whether to write one or another type of poem. For me writing a poem used to be easy but that was before I knew anything about forms and stuff but now I take it as a challenge and enjoy it when I have managed to write one.

Overall

A very good poem so I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
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Hello Andy

Review of "Addiction" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A nice poem about being addicted to writing poetry. I remember the time when I could say the same and do the same. Words just flowed and fought until I wrote it down, but nowadays I gotta push to get out even a few words. I like your word choice, very good and I would like to see more of your poems in forms too.

Overall

I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda
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Hello Tiffany

Review of "Desire " 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A beautiful monologue to the propose to the girl of your dreams. Very intense with feeling and desire,however I wouldn't be sure to say this to a girl. She may be a lot shocked with all the deep stuff from your soul but who know she might like that your poetic or something. Well written.

Overall

I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda
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Review of "Metamorphous" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

I'm here to review your poem as part of "RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group" 's Most Credited Reviewers Challenge! And you one of the most credited reviewers, so my congratulations to you!

I love poetry and learning new stuff about them. This form, Inverted Refrain is new to me and reading your poem shows how complex the form is because it not only requires rhyme and rhythm scheme but also the content and the meaning should be in a specific order. All I can say is, Wow! How did you write this? I know it takes a lot of practice to write something like this.

Your poem is about love and the deep passions. I like the way you brought out the heated emotions and feelings, great word choice and placement. I also noticed how you wrote the first four lines and then brought out the essence in them in the last two lines, without making it seem like a repetition of the previous lines.

Your poem rises as beautiful as the full moon bringing out all its wonder and then sets in just as it wanes, leaving the reader waiting for the next full moon.


Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern in the poem of the form given. The rhyme scheme and the 8 syllables per line are maintained perfectly and the lines don't seem even a little bit forced into place. The flow is perfect with the theme and story of the poem.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting and you wrote about the form there, which made me curious to learn a new form.

Suggestions and mistakes

No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.

My Favourite Lines

"Her eyes shining bright, filled with love,
Turn dark, as our passions ignite."
Metamorphosis indeed!


Overall

A great poem, one of the best I've read in ages, so I am giving it 5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!

~Princess Zelda
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Hello Ellie Maynard Bryerton

Review of "Clutter" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A thought provoking poem with a lot of questions. I can say that I have thought through these questions earlier and have no particular answers too. I wouldn't say this is as a poem but you could modify it to seem more like one by adding proper line breaks and punctuation too. This is just my friendly suggestion.

Overall

I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda
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Hello Leo Wethers

Review of "Seasons of Man" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A nice comparison of seasons and the progression of man. Autumn and spring are my favourite seasons but I never had to think of autumn as a time of death and decay. Looks like spring and summer are the most good times for prosperity and growth and this is true in all cases. Well written.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern of the form a,a,b,b in the poem and this works well.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Suggestions and mistakes

You could add proper punctuation to make the poem to better flow and readable. This is just my friendly suggestion.


Overall

I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda
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Hello CMKepley

Review of "Six Hundred Miles" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A nice poem about the woman you love. The whole poem is only partially understandable and this is because of your very tiny mistakes in sentences and the spelling of words.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is rhyming pattern in the poem of the form a,b,a,b and this goes well with the poem.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Suggestions and mistakes

In the second stanza, the third line, you wrote "my beautiful angle" but it should be "beautiful angel" In the third stanza, "six hundred reason" should be plural "reasons" and in the next line "en rout" should be "en route". I would also suggest to use punctuation.
These are just my friendly suggestions.


Overall

I am giving it 3.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda
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Hello Tammy Petry

Review of "Today I Rest" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A poem telling about how you enjoy spending your weekends. Nothing to do and just resting, everybody needs a day like that. Simple and short lines.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is a rhyming pattern of a,a,b and it works well for the flow and rhythm of the poem.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting.

Suggestions and mistakes

You could add proper punctuation at the lines to make the poem readable. These are just my friendly suggestions.


Overall

I am giving it 4 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda
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Review of "A Dance with my Wife" 

General Comments and Emotional Impact

A beautiful poem about the feelings that you have when you dance with you wife. I like your choice of words and the imagination you have. The lines are brought alive and one can actually visualize your wife and you dancing. Well written.

Form and Rhyme Scheme

There is no rhyming pattern in the poem. This is a free form one.

Title and description

The title fits the content very well and the description below is interesting and true to the poem.

Suggestions and mistakes

I would suggest you to add proper punctuation in your lines to make it more readable. This is just my friendly suggestion.

My Favourite Lines

"to watch the drifting musical notes land
in your hair like bubbles and wink like fairy lights"
Very creative imagination here.

Overall

I am giving it 4.5 stars.

Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!


~Princess Zelda
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