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Review of "The Jester Created"
General Comments and Emotional Impact
A poem about the friendship of two young boys and where each of their lives lead. The purpose of each boy is different but somehow interconnected. Josh becomes the reason behind the greatness of Cam, he was the sacrifice for the success and fame of Cam. The poem starts well with the introduction of the characters and the relationship they have. The poem ends well too, by showing the purpose of that friendship and also the final decision taken by Cam to become the Jester.
The poem flows beautifully from the beginning to the end. It didn't seem like I was reading a poem or looking for rhyme and rhythm as this was a poem hidden inside the story. The narration is very good because it kept me occupied and interested till the end.
Form and Rhyme Scheme
There is rhyming pattern in the poem of the form a,a,b,b. I am at awe seeing how beautifully you brought the rhymes without disruption of the story or the flow. Not one rhyme seem like they have been forced into the place. There is a mix of syllable counts like 10,11,12 which are close enough to give a good consistent rhythm throughout the poem.
Title and description
The title fit the content because it explains what can be found in the poem and what the poem is about. The description explains the important transformation that happens in this part of the story.
Suggestions and mistakes
No mistakes in punctuation, spelling or grammar can be found.
My Favourite Lines
"Til then; live, love, and make people smile,
Together we’ll walk, that final mile."
These lines are encouraging and inspiring. The final words spoken by Josh have so much truth, love and care for Cam. There is wonderful imagery in the last line, like two best friends walking towards the sunset, just as their life together come to a stop as well.
Overall
An excellent poem that deserves all the stars. I am giving it 5 stars.
Thank you for sharing your work. Keep writing!