Jordan Langer's (jlanger) Reviews

Jordan Langer

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#2354821

Review of The Airshow

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Rated: E

| (3.0)

The writing style is different, but it's not entirely bad. If you really wanted to work on this one, you could dissect it and make it poem. That would take away some of the awkward sentence forms. A few grammar issues here. Good descriptions.

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Review of Irony

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

I am actually quite fond of this kind of poetry (merely observation), and I must say that you've done a wonderful job with this one. I really like where you've chosen to break your lines. Thank you for being creatively descriptive; the descriptions "verandah" and "eucalypt thrones" help the reader stand in the writer's shoes.

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#2354304

Review of Autumn Wishes

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Well, thank you for persuading me to drop by your portfolio. It was well worth the time, and all the descriptions are so elegantly threaded.

Good to read something besides the cliche teenage angst poetry that is common in writing websites like this.

If you have time, you could review something from my portfolio...perhaps this poetry piece:

In Gratitude

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2 poems. A mock reproduction of William Carlos Williams' "This is just to say..."
#1248976 by Jordan Langer

You're expertise in writing is very evident. This poem particularily struck me.

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#2354207

Review of Beauty Missed

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Nothing to criticize here. Gorgeous descriptions. Sunsets are endless topics... thanks for not being cliche!

Know the feeling. Have you ever been to Disney World? The fireworks are wonderful, and I can remember wishing there was someone I could wrap my arms around.

We simply cannot enjoy things as much when alone. That's why God created women for men. But I think someday the tradgedy ends.

Thanks for the testimony.

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#2353663

Review of A Valentine's Lament

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Rated: E

| (3.0)

Really like the last line "we dine in the dark". The idea of an unsigned valentine card is also striking. Some of the lines seem cliche, though, and I think you could come up with a better way to introduce your poem in the first two lines.

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#2353620

Review of The Drinking Pool

Review by Jordan Langer

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Yes. This is a quality poem. Thanks for suggesting I read it.

If you have time, go ahead and read a poem that I have written. It is a free verse poem, so it may or may not suit you. And I do not mind criticism.

{bitem: 1248879}

This poem really deserves praise. Good work.

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#2353150

Review of Cold Bed

Review by Jordan Langer

Rated: 13+

| (3.0)

Good closure sentence. There are some fragments, and sometimes the sentences even contain too much brevity. Try varying your sentence openers as well.