I found this when tapped on the Rate and Review link.
Well, this was not what I expected when I tapped on that link.
This is well written, well thought out, enjoyable. I see no glaring errors. Often with shorter pieces like this, I recommend extending it, writing more, fleshing it out. If you get the urge to extend this, please conquer the urge! This is good just the way it is.
I found this when I tapped rate & review button. This is very good. This is well written. It's obvious that you took your time, thinking this out, perfecting it. I applaud you. I must let you know I found WdC quite by accident, I just don't remember what I was looking for at the time.
I don't normally give out 5 stars, but I here for a couple reasons. First off, I have at various times in my lifetime been both receiving and volunteering. I won't discuss receiving. Volunteering at a local food bank through my church was one of the most rewarding things I've done. The Resource Center is now closed for numerous reasons, and my church is supporting hunger relief in other ways which I help out with. I would burn a couple vacation days from work so I could put time in at the resource center, it was that rewarding. It was hard work that I loved doing.
The other reason you got 5 stars from me is this is so well written. I hope you submitted this to Philabundance for their promotional use. You have do e very well with this.
This is good, but it has issues. There are some typos and grammar issues. Near the end, when everybody is pulling on here, I. Had to go back and we what bird. Also, the next sentence makes no sense whatsoever. Please re-read this, it needs fixing.
I rarely take issue with ratings, but the Intro Rating is Non-E. Why? I see nothing offensive in it.
Allman all, it's a nice story that needs a little tender loving care.
I found this on the Read & Review link on the homepage. Imagine my surprise to notice that it's 4 hours old!
This is very well written, and so true. My wife has probably influenced my writing far more than I know. I think the only change I would suggest is in the next to the last sentence, Ch dear beloved to dearly beloved. And that, I think, is just a stylistic choice.
Unfulfilling. Dissatisfaction And honestly, on a story such as this, I think it's a good thing. We all want the malefactors to get their just comeuppance, and that isn't reality. You wrote this well. We feel Ms. Sorensen's humiliation, and her frustration. I see no glaring errors, nothing I would change (other than nailing the little rat's @$$ that did that to her, but then there goes the story). I didn't like this, and that is what you were going for. Well done.
Merry Christmas. I'm giving reviews as gifts for Christmas and this popped up.
My first reaction was similar to Sam's when Ms. Abigail offered the cooking. "What the heck. I'll give it a shot." So I read it.. You have done well. This is well written. The characters are well developed, believable, and interesting. The situation and Sam's dilemma are believable. I see no glaring errors, nothing I would change.
Merry Christmas! I'm giving reviews as gifts this Christmas.
I had never heard of a diatelle before. As I am not a poet, I would find writing this extremely difficult. However, and although I am not a fan of poetry, I found this to be intriguing. I counted some of the syllables in each line, and found no mistakes. I see no glaring errors, nothing I would change. Thanks for the notes at the end. I might have been lost without it.
Merry Christmas! I am giving a few reviews as Christmas presents and this popped up.
Am I ever glad I found this. As one grandparent to another, I can truly say I agree with you wholeheartedly! I urge you to look at "A birth announcement limerick" and "Another Birth Announcement" and perhaps "Happiness " , all from my port as examples of what grandkids mean to us.
On to this. This is well-written. I see no glaring errors, nothing I'd recommend you change. Well done.
Merry Christmas! I'm giving reviews as Christmas presents and this popped up.
First off, I hope this is a true story. May God bless yin for your compassion. I should do the same.
I really like this. This well written. You express yourself well. As a resident of Florida, I thoroughly appreciate your desire for lower temps come July! I will be the first to admit I don't understand poetry, especially freeform poetry, very well. I think (& it's just my opinion) every line should be capitalized. I like the words you colorized. I think it adds a certain pizzazz. I would recommend colorizing more of the words, maybe all of the verbs.
Merry Christmas! I'm giving a few reviews as Christmas presents and this popped up.
I find some easily fixed problems with this. But first, notice that you got 4 stars. You have expressed yourself very well. It is depressing, sad and bitchy, which I feel you were going for. Hence the 4 stars.
Now, the problems. You switch tenses often:
Tuesday
It was another day that STARTED peacefully. However, as the afternoon PROGRESSES, your parents SAW on TV News Reporters and the weather people warning everyone that the weather tomorrow could be quite disastrous and they should make plans to protect themselves today! Your father ROLLS his eyes before he SWITCHES channels to a comedy movie with Nicholas Cage in it.
Choose a tense. I would recommend staying in past tense:
Tuesday
It was another day that STARTED peacefully. However, as the afternoon PROGRESSED, your parents saw on TV News Reporters and the weather people warning everyone that the weather tomorrow could be quite disastrous and they should make plans to protect themselves today! Your father ROLLED his eyes before he SWITCHED channels to a comedy movie with Nicholas Cage in it.
IMHO, this improves it immensely. There are other examples, I just chose to highlight this particular passage.
I love limericks. They say they are the lowest form of poetry. I don't care. This is a good limerick. Maybe not the best, but good. I've read some that I couldn't get through all 5 lines. This was better than that. I think the last 2 lines need work. IMHO, they just don't work. Work on it and let me know if you change it, and I'll rerate it. I'll think about it, too and throw you a suggestion if I come up with one.
I did not intend to read this. I was looking for something else and clicked this instead. Am I ever glad I did.
I like this. One thing you need to understand is that I do not like poetry. But I like this. It captures the essence of that first kiss, whether it's the first or the thousandth person you kiss. You have a talent for this. I try to find something to criticize, but I can't. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of literature.
This is very good. Your love is a very lucky person indeed to have someone who expresses their feelings so positively. I see no glaring error, misspellings, grammar. I'm no poetry expert, but you have doe well.
This is very well written. You have told your tale in a way that many (including yours truly) simply cannot. It found no glaring errors, nothing to correct. My only suggestion is, maybe name the dragon. But even that is unnecessary. The story in the poem is 100% complete without it.
Very good. Well thought out, and highly amusing. I like the build up. The conversation is normal (by caveman standards). You have done well. I see no errors that I would change. I like how you named the characters, with the adjectives. Well done
Congratulations. I found this on the read & review tool.
That's the good news.
Here's the bad news: I don't get it. It's written without any noticeable errors. I understand that you wrote this in reaction to trying something new. I just don't understand it. Reu: a 3 is not a bad score. 3 is average.
Imagine my surprise! I was trying to click on one thing and this popped up instead. You done good. As a burglar what would you do. I see no errors or goofs. What you have here is a good quick read. Consider expanding this into a full short story. P'raps this changes the burglar's life and he goes around breaking into people's houses to do good. Have fun with it. You could have fun with that.
I found this when I hit the Read and review randomizer.
First off, I am not a fan of poetry. This is not a bad poem. I had to concentrate while I was reading it, which is not a bad thing. I found no errors, although I had to reread a couple stanzas to make sure. Yes, this was dark, but you could also list it as religious, the third stanza struck me that way in particular. All in all, a good read.
Well, this was different. Found this when I clicked on the random read button. Turns out, it was better than I expected. Half way through, I was ready to give this 2 stars. Then I realized I was still reading it, and I don't get through 2 star posts. It had deficiencies. It was wordy, especially at the beginning. I felt you used a dozen words when 3 or 4 would do. But it was a good read too. I got curious. Where was Alberto? Why was he strapped in? What was going on? It kept my attention, which is what we as authors want. So you ended up with 3 1/2 stars.
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