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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is quite an incredible collection. Thank you for sharing these tales.

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Review of All Together  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

The description reminded me more of the abusive relationship I was in that ended in 2014. I became a parent in 2021 and had no time to count how much sleep I got, but the reason I couldn't sleep actually needed me for survival.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for the warning. This doesn't sound like my cup of tea.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

I recommend organizing this into shorter paragraphs for easier reading.

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Review of LOVE IN DISGUSE  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

The slap chapter was well-written, but the other chapters read more like a summary of events than a story. Try to bring the reader into the moment more.

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Review of Sink or Swim  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was a very interesting read. The concept of surrendering to pain brought me back to giving birth. It's a temporary surrender, but without it, our species would not exist in its present form. Medicated birth is a very recent phenomenon, and quite popular, though completely blocking out the pain comes with its own dangers, especially when Pitocin is involved.

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Review of Lost Path  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This sounds like a wonderful place to visit. Thanks for taking me on a mental journey, as I may never travel this far with my physical body.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. Thanks for giving my mind something to chew on.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

The use of both first and second person here reminds me of Soramimi Hanarejima's stories. I highly recommend them.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I used my internet browser to translate this to English, so I will not comment on the grammar.

Reading this makes me nostalgic for my school years. I was ready to move on to other things, though.

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Review of The Moon  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is very beautiful. I've had a couple of real people I felt I could tell anything to, but I scared them away, so I started typing to them letters that they would never actually read.

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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Thank you for requesting my review!

This piece is laid out like a poem, but it doesn't quite feel like a poem when I actually read it. It seems like mostly a character introduction to a longer piece.

If this came to me as a submission, I would need to read a completed manuscript before coming to a decision, though I often give up reading early when I'm not hooked into the plot. I see a lot of character development and world building here, but modern readers (and editors) are impatient to get a taste of the plot.

I recommend studying some ways to hook the reader and reading several examples of excellent hooks. See how they reveal the characters through their actions. Backstory is often presented a bit later, at a moment when the reader can see how it is relevant to the character's behavior in the current crisis.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This brings echoes of a song my ex-boyfriend shared with me about fame to my mind.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. Thanks for giving my mind something to chew on.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Unfortunately, this writing style makes my head spin. I recommend editing this into shorter paragraphs for easier reading.

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Review of Van Gogh's Shoes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've spun these words in a magnificent manner, painting a vivid image in just a few lines.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I've been watching "The Crown" on Netflix, and this poem certainly reflects a lot of what I've seen there.

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Review of Short Lived  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was an interesting poem. Personally, I felt more motivated to study by my romances. I had the most glorious intellectual conversations with my first love at university, and we met up before our shared calculus class to study.

I also had a boyfriend in high school, but I don't consider her my first love. My feelings for her were always warm but never intense. She's my best friend now, and I was one of the first people she confided in about her trans identity.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've covered a lot of emotions here in just a few short words. I don't think I've ever seen this movie, but I can imagine my own scene.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You’ve painted a vivid picture with your words. Thank you for taking me on this journey with you.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Friendship  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was delightfully uplifting. A few people sprung into my mind while reading this.

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