Awesome...That's all I can really say! Your imagery throughout this entire piece is impeccable. Every line you had written left me wanting more. I was hooked from the very beginning. It has almost a poetic feel to it, with the use of your description and imagery. You seem to be a very thoughtful and creative writer. I look forward to reading more from you.
I cannot really think of anything for you to add in order to improve this piece. I love the ending...It wasn't something I had really been expecting, and I love stories that catch me like that!
Keep Writing,
Kelsey
This is a good poem! It's pretty and it flows quite nicely. I also love the subject...I am a horse person myself :) The only typo I found was in the line "My son were going
to the Promise Land."
The "were" should be "we're"...
Other than that, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this! Your word choice helped me, as a reader, envision this cowboy and his last ride. I also loved the ending...It was clever and left me feeling happy for the old man, to know that even in Heaven he can still experience what he loved! ,
KelseyLynn
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