I like this poem it is well written and some great detail in it.
The second verse stood out the most to me the way
you compared the words meaning to something else.
The flow of the poem is good throughout.
I enjoy reading this poem and thank you for sharing this piece with me.
This piece of writing is interesting.
I like how you start with Dear and end with Your sincerely.
The first line is good because it does not give too much away and makes
you think about what different pages.
The second line is even better with the line break making you stop for a second
to think about it and then the third line giving it away.
The detail in the next five lines is short but to the point also with good line breaks.
This piece is very well written.
Thank you for sharing this with me.
The first verse pulls you into the poem.
The words you have chosen reflect a lot of detail in this poem.
It is short but straight to the point.
This poem is written well, and the words are very well chosen.
Thank you for sharing this poem it is an enjoyable read.
The title goes well with this poem and comes across strong.
Your grammar and spelling are spot on from what I can tell.
I like how you used two things here to decribe it which both fit together.
As the colours reflect the emotions and the different feelings,
how the knitting ties it all together, as in life there are always ups and
downs.
My favorite part is
Those memories in her trust.....
segments of other people
were reflected in strands of bitter green
and candy pink, and streaks of smoky blue.
I think the title goes well.
Wow I find this really intresting with the two times you have wrote it.
I think I like the second version better.
One line though I would of kept the same is,
but if one should walk apart, ( try and ) understand.
In the second version I would of kept the, ( try and )
It stood out to me more that way, but that's just what I think.
This poem has a whole lot of feeling and meaning to it,
which every version, they are both good.
I also see the meter in the second version, thanks to you.
I enjoyed reading these.
I like the title, Borrowed time.
Your spelling and grammar are spot on from what I can tell.
My favorite part or the part that stood out most to me, are the last two lines.
Memories are deceptive.
Do not dwell on the past.
I enjoyed reading this poem, there was something different about it and I found it
challenging to try review it.
I get a mixed feeling of how it makes me feel. Meaning I can look at it with a sad
feeling but also a happy one too.
I find the title goes well. Spelling and grammar are great, from what I can tell.
You use a wide range of words to describe things in this poem.
I get a sad feeling from this, as to the choices needing to be made.
My favorite part of the poem is,
I have waded in the spring of tears
seeking its fleeting relief,
only to shiver,
exposed to the relentless wind of logic.
I found that part stood out the most to me, the words you used and the way they flow.
The title goes well with this, after me reading it.
I liked reading this because as mad as the story is ( not meant in a bad way) I still read it,
and could sort of have that picture in my head of it happening. Which is what you want from
a story, to feel that you are a part of what your reading.
The flow of the story is good and kept me interested.
Your spelling and grammar are spot on from what I can tell.
My favorite parts are:
"Huh? I can talk to cockroaches?"
no sooner was the thought formulated, when there was an irritable reply.
"of course you can, you silly woman; I never bothered to reply before.
I also like the last four sentences at the end.
The wide range of words you use to describe things in your story, I also find good.
I enjoyed reading this.
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