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Rated: E | (2.5)
Story seems autobiographical, at least in part. The verb tense switches a lot; sometimes past tense and sometimes present tense. Numerous run-on sentences, some spelling issues but this can be fixed with time, experience and education (not necessarily schooling, but it does help). The use of the comma in place of an end mark (.?!) makes it a little hard to follow but the fact that you completed this is an accomplishment. The use of the 'bottle" as a metaphor works but it wasn't immediately clear and took some time. Maybe it was just me.

Honestly, I remember a time in which I wrote much like this; especially in my early 20s. Keep up the writing and getting better at your craft. It won't be long before you make the transition. Good effort.
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