I find that interesting, natural, with little to spare makeup(a touch of lip gloss, lightly applied mascara and blush on women is a whole lot better than caked on, over used anything is unattractive and entirely unnecessary.
Anger going down the mountain side(one word)[just?] like molten lava turning into a knife hurting someone just like that.
An angry storm cloud at the table as an uninvited guest.(This sentence sounds awkward.) Everyone gets angry(period) now. [;?] They start to fight and squabble.
Now everyone is angry(period)(new sentence) a ferocious group of people tread down the street(comma) angrily and start to fight(period)(new sentence) everyone one else is staring at the commotion(comma) not noticing one guy in the corner having an allergic reaction(period) and eventually dying(period) and once the local police turns up to stop the fight, he is long dead.
A suggestion:Try reading your work aloud. See if it sounds right. Using proper grammar makes it easier for the reader.
Sometimes I'm mad. Sometimes I'm sad.
Sometimes I'm happy.
Does that make me tripolar?
At least you keep busy. If it weren't for hobbies, I'd probably go insane.
Have you ever seen a mini yo-yo quilt? My grandmother made one for me. Classic Americana. My brother and sister only got a regular sized one. I'm the eldest.
You're right about fleshing out my story. It just made me feel good stand alone.
Your frustrations and bad thoughts about being yourself are clearly warranted; coming from a family with a long history of abuse, it's a wonder you're sane at all! What a trooper you must be.
Hopefully, this story will make you smile: "Sharon's Coming"
I know for a fact that speaking at parties or public in general can be intimidating. Especially if you're buzzed.
If you intend to speak, do it with a clear mind and with the conscious that you truly believe what you say.
My favorite passage is:
The awkwardness felt like thick syrup. Time ground to a halt. My mind raced to find something to say. It drew twenty-one blanks, and the best it came up with was “Um.”
She has nothing special, she’s aan average person . That girl is never late, but she never arrives early.
She’s good in some subject I think although she never shows any arrogance about it.
Every time I see her, I just said hi and I walk away. We have nothing to saytothe each other anyway.
In class, she’s always sitting in the back with her best friend, what’s her name again?
She havehas simple brown hair, every time the sun shines through, her color turn like gold. It’s pretty but not extraordinary.
When reading your work out loud, it's easier to find the optimal flow.
Sometimes I write down words that rhyme. Even just syllables.
Take the word be
Be,Free,See,Three,Me,Tree,Thee,Spree,FleeGee,He,Bounty,Lovey,Dicey,Pricey,Nicely
the perfect me
Syllables can be stretched and emphasized—bent to your will.
I lost someone very dear to me three years ago.[space]It took me alonga long time to get back to my old self after losing my boyfriend of fifteen years.[space]I dealt with it in my own way .[spaceThen i started to go to counseling to help me deal with my grief.[space]With the help of family and friends i came through it just fine and now i am back to my old self again.
Avoid too many ands. A sentence is a complete thought. Use a period in instead.
I tend to agree, but warming and cooling eras come and go. It's cyclical. Millions of years ago, there was so much CO2, everything was bigger. At least the plants and animals were.
Renewables come with their own unintended consequences. HUGE tracts of land, and how to properly dispose of their toxic components like lithium and cadmium.
Yes, they are great alternatives, and we're getting there, but we're not ready. Yet. Nor is the American electric grid.
China and India are not even close to doing their share. As usual, it's us carrying the load. Biden is not helping. Has he ever?
The Earth has been through ice ages, tectonic shifts and changing sea levels from the beginning.
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