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Review of Longing  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Love. Can't live with it
Can't live with it
Some are swept off their feet, jump off the deep end, sacrificing it all for that thing called love.

I found no spelling miscues or glaring grammatical errors.
Nicely done. *Bigsmile*
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Review of Writing.Com 101  Open in new Window.
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Review by Pensivity Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I keep it simple, pointing out three or four key bullet points. Proper usage of grammar, correct spelling and clearly punctuated.

Above all is to be encouraging and helpful. Be polite, névêr too critical with suggestions.

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Review of Ideas  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I find that interesting, natural, with little to spare makeup(a touch of lip gloss, lightly applied mascara and blush on women is a whole lot better than caked on, over used anything is unattractive and entirely unnecessary.
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Review of Anger  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Anger going down the mountain side(one word)[just?] like molten lava turning into a knife hurting someone just like that.


An angry storm cloud at the table as an uninvited guest.(This sentence sounds awkward.) Everyone gets angry(period) now. [;?] They start to fight and squabble.


Now everyone is angry(period)(new sentence) a ferocious group of people tread down the street(comma) angrily and start to fight(period)(new sentence) everyone one else is staring at the commotion(comma) not noticing one guy in the corner having an allergic reaction(period) and eventually dying(period) and once the local police turns up to stop the fight, he is long dead.

A suggestion:Try reading your work aloud. See if it sounds right. Using proper grammar makes it easier for the reader.
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Review by Pensivity Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Time. Can't stop it. Can't slow it down. And you certainly cannot get it back. Ever. In Einstein's world, time and space are all relevant.

"Those who do not remember the past are condemned to repeat it. (George Santayana)

Learn something new each day, then pass it on.

If you truly love what you do, you'll never work a day in your life.

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Review by Pensivity Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Sometimes I'm mad. Sometimes I'm sad.
Sometimes I'm happy.
Does that make me tripolar? *Bigsmile*

At least you keep busy. If it weren't for hobbies, I'd probably go insane.

Have you ever seen a mini yo-yo quilt? My grandmother made one for me. Classic Americana. My brother and sister only got a regular sized one. I'm the eldest.

You're right about fleshing out my story. It just made me feel good stand alone.
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Review of WRITER'S BLOCK  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
JJ, I too often feel the same way. Too many things running through my head.

I find the best motivation comes from people I've met. Especially women or places I've visited.

Good luck!

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Review of The End  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Scary, yet possibly true stuff. One cannot help but wonder if there's nothing we can do to stop the madness.

Your writing is beautiful and I found only one spelling miscue: the missal[missile] hit the ground.

Overall, good job!
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Review of Crazy  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
So, so very sad. It must hurt, knowing you gave it your all, but still, it's never enough, nor ever will be.

One tip: instead of using --, use an emdash. —

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Review by Pensivity Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Serena, long time no hear.

Your frustrations and bad thoughts about being yourself are clearly warranted; coming from a family with a long history of abuse, it's a wonder you're sane at all! What a trooper you must be.

Hopefully, this story will make you smile: "Sharon's ComingOpen in new Window.
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Review of The Squirrel  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
It's a bit hard to say this, but you're absolutely right! There's no sense in fighting nature. It, in the end, it always wins.

I found no misspellings, just one possible grammatical miscue: as well as(,) a half decent looking yard.

Excellent job! I sincerely hope you keep on writing.

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Review of THE DOVE'S MUSIC  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Kudos on your spelling acumen!

Your cute little story could use a few paragraphs breaks rather than be presented as one long sentence.

Keep writing
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Review of Growing Up  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
There's nothing like the moment you realize that Santa is just another fairy tale; a big 'ol lie.

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Review by Pensivity Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I know for a fact that speaking at parties or public in general can be intimidating. Especially if you're buzzed.

If you intend to speak, do it with a clear mind and with the conscious that you truly believe what you say.

My favorite passage is:
The awkwardness felt like thick syrup. Time ground to a halt. My mind raced to find something to say. It drew twenty-one blanks, and the best it came up with was “Um.”

I've been there. It sucks!

No grammatical miscues noted.
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Review of Poo  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
"Poo", what it is (s***, crap, dookie.)

Blame it on the dog.

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Review of Do You?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Congrats on your interesting, yet almost universal prepositions.

Though I do not see any connection between hating food and people. 🤫




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Review of Shine Far  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Short, sweet and clever!

A suggestion;

[With its chilly] early morning sight,

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Review of Ghost Peppers  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Exellent beginning for your story! The killer is demented and quite devious as well.

Your spelling is impeccable and the only possible error I found is: Too bad, you made this [to]? easy.”




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Review of Van Gogh's Shoes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Bravo! My favorite passage: This muted tone throne I own
A tapestry of pain brutal be sewn
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Review by Pensivity Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I must say that your word wizardry is quite refreshing!

One suggestion:

a soul that grieves(to grieve?),
For a love that fate could not retrieve.
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Review by Pensivity Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Girls do tend to notice the small stuff.

Write On!
The girl in the back.
A few nits:


She has nothing special, she’s aan average person . That girl is never late, but she never arrives early.
She’s good in some subject I think although she never shows any arrogance about it.


Every time I see her, I just said hi and I walk away. We have nothing to saytothe each other anyway.
In class, she’s always sitting in the back with her best friend, what’s her name again?


She havehas simple brown hair, every time the sun shines through, her color turn like gold. It’s pretty but not extraordinary.

When reading your work out loud, it's easier to find the optimal flow.

*Smile*
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Review of the perfect me  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Sometimes I write down words that rhyme. Even just syllables.
Take the word be

Be,Free,See,Three,Me,Tree,Thee,Spree,FleeGee,He,Bounty,Lovey,Dicey,Pricey,Nicely
the perfect me
Syllables can be stretched and emphasized—bent to your will.

Keep writing!

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Review of the best topping  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
As a chef, I agree that hands down, cheese is the one topping where you can never go wrong.

No nits here. Great job!


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Review by Pensivity Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
What would we do without true friends and family?

Some nits:


I lost someone very dear to me three years ago.[space]It took me alonga long time to get back to my old self after losing my boyfriend of fifteen years.[space]I dealt with it in my own way .[spaceThen i started to go to counseling to help me deal with my grief.[space]With the help of family and friends i came through it just fine and now i am back to my old self again.

Avoid too many ands. A sentence is a complete thought. Use a period in instead.


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Review of Global Warming  Open in new Window.
Review by Pensivity Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I tend to agree, but warming and cooling eras come and go. It's cyclical. Millions of years ago, there was so much CO2, everything was bigger. At least the plants and animals were.

Renewables come with their own unintended consequences. HUGE tracts of land, and how to properly dispose of their toxic components like lithium and cadmium.

Yes, they are great alternatives, and we're getting there, but we're not ready. Yet. Nor is the American electric grid.

China and India are not even close to doing their share. As usual, it's us carrying the load. Biden is not helping. Has he ever?

The Earth has been through ice ages, tectonic shifts and changing sea levels from the beginning.

The biggest danger is ourselves. *Smile*


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