I really like this poem. I am glad that you are free. Sometimes we must go through a tremendous amount of pain to be free, but it's all worth it in the end
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OVERALL IMPRESSION: A very special and heartfelt poem.
SUGGESTIONS: Don't have any suggestions.
PUNCTUATION/SPELLING/GRAMMAR: No spelling errors.
WHAT I LIKED:I liked the whole poem a lot. A soldiers days are difficult, but you put the right words in the right places. Good imagery your portrayed here. Keep up the good work
After reading "A Poem Of Love" I have the following comments to offer:
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OVERALL IMPRESSION: A very simple, yet to the point poem. The ending is very about love.
SUGGESTIONS: Don't have any suggestions.
PUNCTUATION/SPELLING/GRAMMAR: One extra space between hunting and dog.
WHAT I LIKED:I liked the whole poem a lot. Liked your cover and the simplicity of the poem. Good meaning. Keep up the good work
After reading "Invalid Item" I have the following comments to offer:
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OVERALL IMPRESSION: Very unique.
SUGGESTIONS: Don't have any suggestions.
PUNCTUATION/SPELLING/GRAMMAR: No spelling errors.
WHAT I LIKED:I liked how the background is blurred out putting all the emphasis on the word love. Keep up the good work
After reading "Veiled" I have the following comments to offer:
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OVERALL IMPRESSION: A very unique type of poem. Short, but beautiful. It is so true about aging. I am getting up their in age and I can already relate to the experience of some of what you said.
SUGGESTIONS: Don't have any suggestions.
PUNCTUATION/SPELLING/GRAMMAR: No spelling errors.
WHAT I LIKED:I liked the poem a lot. A good read for anyone at any age. Keep up the good work
After reading "Broken" I have the following comments to offer:
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OVERALL IMPRESSION: A very unique and deep poem. Understood it as it go to the end.
SUGGESTIONS: Don't have any suggestions.
PUNCTUATION/SPELLING/GRAMMAR: No spelling errors.
WHAT I LIKED:I liked the whole poem a lot. Great imagery. Keep up the good work
After reading {item:1539417I have the following comments to offer:
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OVERALL IMPRESSION: A very unique type of poem about not having a father.
SUGGESTIONS: Take so out of the 5th stanza and no capital letter on dad.
PUNCTUATION/SPELLING/GRAMMAR: No spelling errors.
WHAT I LIKED:I The ending especially His hand held in mine
After reading {item:1459393I have the following comments to offer:
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OVERALL IMPRESSION: A very unique type of poem. Short, but gets the message across.
SUGGESTIONS: Don't have any suggestions.
PUNCTUATION/SPELLING/GRAMMAR: No spelling errors.
WHAT I LIKED:I liked the whole poem a lot. Really like the imagery your portrayed here. Keep up the good work
After reading {item:1459393I have the following comments to offer:
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OVERALL IMPRESSION: I liked the poem it spoke from the heart. I'm sorry for your loss.
SUGGESTIONS: Take out had in the 7th stanza, 3rd line.
PUNCTUATION/SPELLING/GRAMMAR: Tears and heart don't rhyme in the 6th stanza.
WHAT I LIKED: The subject, the element of surprise and the love.
The only comment I have beside, I understand is that alive and night do not match if you're trying to do rhyme. But keep up the good job and keep writing
After reading {item:1411743I have the following comments to offer:
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OVERALL IMPRESSION: A very true poem. Caused me to think and ask questions.
SUGGESTIONS: Line 14 take out even.
PUNCTUATION/SPELLING/GRAMMAR: Line 13 can not is one word.
WHAT I LIKED:I liked the whole poem. It gave a message about freedom and obtaining and securing it. Interesting subject and great rhyming.
Good poem. A few suggestions though. Bear should be BARE then put a period after that, Take out even before care, take out always before be, take out just before me. It make the poem flow better together. Keep writing
You might want to change the rating to 18. Fourth stanza, first line, should he should be he's. The last two lines don't make sense or you could elaborate on it. Keep writing.
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