general thoughts A tiny bit confusing, but very well written and interesting.
content This is where the confusing part comes in-I'm not super sure what is going on. My ideas? Either suicide or murder. I like the confusion though, it fits the poem very well.
grammar, spelling, etc. hmm...there are a few times that you capitalize the second word as well as the first in the line. I'm not sure if this was intentional or not, but I figured I would let you know just in case!
likes Everything! I like the alliteration in the first line. I really love the last stanza-it's very interesting. I like that you don't completely state what is going on-you leave it open for interpretation. Also-I love the rhyme in the poem-it's not a set scheme, which I think is wonderful!
dislikes hmm...none!
suggestions uhm...maybe just that you check the capitalization, just to be sure if you mean it to be there. Also-the punctuation in the first line of the second stanza confuses me a bit, it may just be me, but I'm not sure.
~Ashlbee
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