Very good start to the story. I got into it quickly. The end seamed a little rushed. Maybe add a line between "I can tell you" line and the last line.
If you want to keep the same word count you could combine your opening with the character entering the house. You main also give him a good reason to check out the basement.
Overall a very good Flash Fic with clear beginning middle and ending.
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