A excellent poem in all aspects. Word selection, flow, rhymes, were all assembled to create a great poem. The message was clear and a very relevant topic. I enjoyed your work immensely. You have skills, make sure you continue to use them and share with the world. LeWag
The winter break and the spring break adventures. The contrast between the cold activities and the warm you enjoy. I guess we all have our own definition of fun and what we enjoy. Good poem , well written, keep up the good work. LeWag
A very good poem both entertaining and well written. The flow was excellent and the choice of words fit well with the message. I enjoyed reading it and I found it humoress.Keep up the good work and keep writing. LeWag
Sounds like you had the blues and could not shake them. Your wording was okay but your sentence structure was confusing.,Keep writing and you will learn the technique through this website. Lewag
I was caught up in the beginning going with the rhyme and flow and then everything changed. It seemed like one poem ended and another began. Both were okay but I would have preferred finishing one before embarking on the other. Keep writing LeWag
I was somewhat lost trying to figure out who he was you were referring to. I could'nt figure out was it someone personal or a higher being..I guess it depends on your own interpretation, for it could be either. You talk about his recognition of the heat and we don;t know if it is a fellow citizen or a agent of the LORD.Your explanation of your pl;ight is clear but who recognizes and influences the outcome leaves me puzzled. Maybe this is your intention and the beauty of the work, I"ll never know and maybe this is the beauty of the poem. Nevertheless it was a good poem, keep writing. LeWag
You must have been inspired by good weather wherever you were. I know you could not have been in the midwest unless you wrote this in the summer. You used a lot of very descriptive terms, so you must have felt very good. keep up the good work. LeWag
I do'nt see caged love, but the lack of love. When you are in love you don't feel caged. What you describe is trapped , looking for a way out. Good poem, but not about love. LeWag
A very touching poem. I was moved by the message you conveyed and the despair I could sense you felt. It is frustrating to lose your innocence and have to deal with the cruel world and reality. All we can do is hope and pray, and try and maintain our integrity and humanity . Good poem, keep writing and telling the story. LeWag
Good poem describing the scene very well. You included emotion which your words pictured vividly. Your flow was good and your choice of words exceptional..Keep up the good work. LeWag
You have a definite grasp of the English language as your poem demonstrates. You chose a complicated way to convey the anguish and lonleness many of face in life. This poem reflects someone who has lost all hope and is just biding time until the inevitable occurs. I wonder if the coke bottle is a sign of hope or a symbol of no hope to come? Excellent use of the english language but difficult to read. Keep up the good work. LeWag
A very good poem describing a winter scene. Your choice of words and your rhyming make this one of the better poems I have read. You have skills and I hope you continue to develope them. Keep up the good work. LeWag
It appears you were having a bad day at work, and you were equating your machines to your frustations. A lot of good work comes from our frustration at the moment and our surroundings when it occurs. At least something good came about that day. Keep writing and expressing your feelings. LeWag
Good poem painting a picture like a artist with brush and canvas. Exccellent job of creating a scene and a mood of silence with the ocean and cliffs as a background. A litle girl dwarfed in the magnitude, indifferent to it all. Good job, keep writing. LeWag
Short and sweet, and very entertaining. That's a new way of framing our desire to get away from it all. The desire to have peace is a compelling force that drives us all to seek utopia. Good poem, keep writing. LeWag
Excellent usage of the english language. Your thoughs were explained clearly and your message was very clear. I was able to see your progression and your escape from your agony. Good job and good poem. LeWag
Words and the use and teaching of words seems to be interwoven throughout your past. It seems that your family chose professions where words were important. In keeping with the family tradition you are using words quite well in your poetry. Keep writing. LeWag
Very emotional for those who have been exposed to people with addictions. There is always that question about survival. Good job touching on a tragedy that many people face today. Keep writing. LeWag
A good poem describing a cold wintry day. Your depiction of the wintry landscape was very good. A good choice of word make this a good poem. Keep writing, LeWag
Great poem about those cancer sticks. After reading this you might get a few converts. Being a smoker myself, you got me thinking with all those negative names. Keep up the good work. LeWag
I could picture your imaginative vision of the dream person you l;onged for. I could also see your fear of rejection. Good job in stimulating the readers imagination. Keep writing. LeWag
I see you have a good grasp of the english language. You worded this poem as if your target audience was for the college educated and higher. The average reader would have to break out the dictionary to understand most of the language. The poem was very descriptive and the love connection was expressed well, although love is simple, keep it that way. Love, especially lovemaking is a basic function. Don't make it a sophisticated act.[ KISS] Keep writing LeWag
I really don't know how to rate this , because of the style and content. It was interesting and it created thought, and the desire to know more. I would have to know more about intent, to rate it fairly. Good usage of words and interesting subject. LeWag
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