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Review by KeithCork Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
"then why does it all has to finish"- I think this is a grammatical error, shouldn't "has" be "have"?

"why is life a momentary bliss"- good line and overall summary of the entire first stanza.

"voices getting more louder"- omit "more"

"let me face this merciless hate"- I love this line. and I also love that the man of this stanza is an insomniac: "...alas! I kept lying awake." This entire stanza if full of such truth

"the insignificance of this material stuff"- I feel stuff is a too general word for this poem. It also sounds much less intellectual than the rest of the poem.

"light one more candle,
others dim"- excellent metaphor

Overall, despite a few grammatical errors, the ideas in this poem are great. I love the contrasting viewpoints of all the stanzas. I am usually not a fan of any type of rhyme scheme, but here it is not altogether noticeable and you did not abandon ideas for the sake of rhyme. Excellent poem! Good work!
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