great piece! i like how you compared Alex's past to the present, and the changes that had been made since, and how the word perfect changed over time. when reading it makes you think of how the world has changed and the way we picture a "perfect world" today. what i would like to see more of, though, is Alex and Helena's relationship. what did she mean to him? what happened to her? what will Alex's life look like now? how I see it, Helena supposedly passed away, and we are so far in the future that we can now create personal robots of real humans. and Alex had a robot made to resemble Helena, so he could go back to how things used to be, even if just for a perfect moment, and then they could have the perfect goodbye. I really like your writing, and the way you tied the end with the beginning of Alex eating his chocolate ice cream. good work!
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