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Passionate, and hungry reader. I try to feel the vibes of the writer, and review accordingly. A. We are all in this together. B. Encouragement, and Empathy followed here. C. I am not a perfect writer or grammarian D. Language works when it works. Communication on some level occurs.
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Cooking, ironing, gardening, digging for fossils, budgeting, photography, writing, reviewing drawing, painting, landscaping, erosion control, research. Spotting patterns, rhythms and minute differences within patterns. Data entry. Taxes. Environmental. Public Service, Problem Solving, Building Databases, Data Entry, finding Free Resources (legally), Brand Building, Social Media The price of my reviews is due to a high demand for reviews. I cannot help but give an in-depth review. Peace.
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Mystery, Juvenile, Childrens, Y/A, Folklore, Story Telling, Native Spiritual, Genealogy, Golden Oldies Sci-Fi,
Least Favorite Genres
Outdated Non-Fiction
Favorite Item Types
Too many to name. I like original content that is "stranger than fiction" from the author's character's experiences. I love when stories pour from the imagination of the writer - and I feel it. Or learn something good.
Least Favorite Item Types
Poetry, because I am really a dive-bar, bathroom poet, and it is too structured.
I will not review...
I do not mean this ugly, please take this from a place of kindness and love - I read a lot. I have been reading a long time. I speed read. If asked to review an item that seems familiar to things read, I will check for plagiarism, and do. I will not review hard porn, poems (unless more prose than poem), nor plagiarized items. I will not call you out. If I turn your review down, it is not about you. It is me and life. Peace.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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 Tales of Haven - Belina Open in new Window. (13+)
Round Five Winner of Witches Circle Contest
#1615463 by EvilDawg - Vigilante Ranger!! Author IconMail Icon
," is an interesting fantasy and adventure. This is a story that could fit into Young Adult genre, but an advanced reader in Juvenile genre would also go for this story to read.

Character: Belina is a strong female warrior. I want a story with a fierce female protagonist and in this story, she exhibits great empathy. After splattering the Orc she makes sure no one was caught or harmed in the crossfire. "...Lucky no one else happened to be close by or ..."

Orcs: Big enough that when they are busting through something they make "... shards of timber surge past her, stinging her arms and hands... doorway, wood splinters strewn out in front of it."

Twists: To be honest, the beginning was a little slow for me because I read tons of YA (Young Adult) books and there has been so much fantasy, mythology, Zena type stories and characters formed, it is hard to come up with completely unique scenarios and plot. You did it:

*Shield6* 1. In the midst of the battle Belina has amnesia. This is where we are introduced.

*Treecypress* 2. Quick disposal of the Northern Orcs. Flip the forest floor switch, and viola, The Orcs are gone.

Hook: You have a few interesting sub-characters who could blow this thing up into a novel or series. These lines are a perfect hook for the reader, "... The town, Haven, is being attacked by Orcs again. Since they are chaotic creatures, yet fighting with purpose and thought, they must be under the control of another Mage. Tessimoor!.."

Overall: Good story. I think it can be excellent. It is my opinion as a reader that you could continue with the great descriptive sentences, keep showing not telling, "Belina turned her attention to the Orcs to the north. There were already several bodies piled up in the center of the street and panic was embracing the remaining citizens as they ran and hid..." Seeing what you have done in breaking the story into word pictures, I would like to see more of that here - as an example. ie; Belina had no trouble finding North as the ground was vibrating, and crowds were screaming...etc.

These are just opinions, I am no expert.

This is your work and it is good.

Write On and Happy Anniversary



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Review of Steam  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This review is in honor of Noticing Newbies

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 Steam Open in new Window. (E)
Just a small poem. Reviews are greatly appreciated.
#1958028 by Anabelle8 Author IconMail Icon
," is a very descriptive poem.

*Vignette6* Anabelle8 Author Icon has taken an element we take for granted every day, and turned it into an identifiable thing. I love the lay-out of the lines, and how there is a type of tension needed to keep a reader hooked.

*Vignette6* "Slim and hazy shadows *Wind*
Looking to escape..."

*Vignette6* and "...The beast retreat slowly, Obediently, Back into The Pot"

*Vignette6* Overall: This poem shows a personality and force in steam. This descriptive poem is unique and a pleasure to read.


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Review of Stingy Jack  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Stingy Jack Open in new Window. (13+)
The origins of the jack-o-lantern has its roots in a very dark tale.
#885998 by DollyX- Back Author IconMail Icon
, is a wonderful story of the Jack-O-Lantern, and how it came to be. This was written as if being told in the manner of a storyteller. I can imagine twenty or thirty people sitting around the campfire, listening to this dark tale, as a park interpreter holds a carved Jack-O-Lantern, with a small candle burning within.

*Jackolantern**Jackolantern* A double treat is It is seeing the devil tricked, and fooled out of the wages of the soul of Stingy Jack for so many years. *Jackolantern**Jackolantern*

This is an older story in your portal, and by now, this could be included within a book of frightful stories.

Formatting: The format is easy to follow, the descriptions and plot are very well done. Suggestion: Consider the layout of the paragraphs. Today's audience want writing or prose that assists the eye of the reader in moving across the pages. That is just an idea. Blocks of print seem to be pleasing to the eye.

This is very well written, and I can almost hear the voice of the story teller.

Write On.

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Review of Imagine Green  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
I love this story. Three stars may seem to be a contradiction but hear me out. A diamond in the rough takes some polishing, heat, buffing, pressure .
My goal for this review is to #1 Be Encouraging. 2 Help a fellow writer.

 Imagine Green Open in new Window. (E)
Futuristic novel, girl is drafted into special army unit against unknown enemies
#1957352 by Anabelle8 Author IconMail Icon
is a story that is unique, and a work that fits what Young Adults are reading in their local libraries. There is so much fantasy, and dystopian, mythology, vampire, faerie witches series out there, it is rare to read something fresh and from the imagination.

Character: You have crafted a unique form of identification rather than names or numbers. The "Futuristic Girl," is well described, and then I thought, "What was her name?" I re-read the story, and found no names, only identifiers. Normally I would request names, but it seems as if in this future and very gray world beings are so de-humanized that they are so much meat. Without names you are able to draw out characteristics of these unique, lost kids who are barreling and groaning down an unknown highway. The interactions of the shy children, the "I am just the bus driver here," gruffness of the driver, and "the girl," give good identification of this new world.

Detail: Are you kidding me. Your descriptions; "...all I see is gray. Not the pleasant color of a grandmother’s hair, but that of a flat, uncompromising landscape.","“But sir, what if I’m colorblind?” the boy whispers, and the whole bus starts giggling..." character interactions , landscape "...I can see nothing past the gate other than the usual grayness of the burn and dead land.,, travel, the whole tale is full of descriptors.

y}Punctuation & Grammar: I need to sweep out from under my porch before pointing out any possible errors I may find, but it is hard for the writer to read their work unbiased. The voices in our heads cause this. As a voracious reader, and now more careful writer, I hope to give help and constructive critique, because it is my opinion that you have something here. I am a greedy reader, and I always want more. Sometimes there is no more, and that is my error. A). "...The land passes by hypnotically..." it could just be me, but maybe... she is hypnotized watching the land pass by... B). "...saw kids that looked ten, and others that looked up to 25." ET's would say; use either the numeral or spell the numbers out, but don't mix them. This may be intentional on your part, just an idea.

Ending: What a twist. I think spoilers put into reviews are rotten, so let me just say that the ending of this grey, ghostly trip was a surprise well worth the read. This is s short story that most YA and some Juvenile Genre readers would enjoy.

Overall: Keep writing - This is a 5 Star plus quality story in the making. Write On!*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star*


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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The difference in me Open in new Window. (13+)
Hi there! I’m Claire and I can almost guarantee that I am different to all of you.
#1930404 by Fran 🌈🧜‍♀️ Author IconMail Icon
is a well written biographical piece for a Writer's Cramp contest.

Format and Layout: I think the format use chose, by breaking up your observations into one long week is a unique and interesting way to display the content. Going through the week shows an excellent description of the writers routine.

This biographical journal is a gentle way of showing how people who judge the intelligence of a person with disabilities, are missing out on getting to know a genius who may be a hoot to know, understanding we all are different..

As I read this work, I kept thinking, *FlowerR* "I'll bet she doesn't realize that people are probably attracted to her for her straight-forward, and adventurous attitude as much, or if not more . *FlowerR*

Sometimes people look past handicaps, and see the interesting, mean, happy, boring, psychic, fun, nice, crabby person. It is "different" to look people in the eye and give them notice. It can be as different as seeming disabilities.

Point of View:{/c} Written like a journal or diary. Thanks for giving us a peek. *Reading*


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Review of Zimmerman Walked  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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 Zimmerman Walked Open in new Window. (13+)
Thoughts on the not guilty verdict for George Zimmerman
#1942919 by G. B. Williams Author IconMail Icon


Heartfelt first response: I am a terrible poet, my best was left behind in the bathroom walls of the Handlebars Saloon, of Pasadena; but your essay reached out, and these words just bubbled up.

Time has passed by,
On the news and in some editorials,
Just-us has been served,
on a plate with a head.

For a gun to Shoot - Legally
they Protest Amend-m-ant-ly number two - Give me my number two
The twosies insist
- my First right
better cower, there in the darkened places,
Speech best line up with the barrel,
or else
- my First right
is denied.

Your Essay: Emotionally charged, and generationally felt, the writer remained fair. "Zimmerman Walked," was a good work of comparison and contrast. It is a difficult task to play chess on both sides of the table. It takes some genius, and I think you have used language well here.

"...people are feeling angry..."
"...others are feeling vindicated..."

Flip sides of the coin. Very nice.

Points of View: Each time I go back and study this work, I find something new.

In order of reactionaries to the Zimmerman verdict; "Zimmerman Wallked"
*Person* People
*People* Races of the People
*Glasses**Bookstack* Judges and Lawyers - the system
*Cab*Police - Law / Order
*Dog1* God - Whose Prayers are Answered?

People of Color - are heartbroken and less safe in the American way this morning.

Overall - It is my opinion that you have written an important statement for the feelings of Black Americans. *Helicopter* *PointLeft*

Comment: Time has passed since "Zimmerman Walked," and many truths have been revealed, and the once free Zimmerman has not be able to skate or walk charges, and according to all news reports his life is no bowl of cherries. Karma, or vengeance or what ever comes around.

Excellent work

disclaimer: I have made up some words, and may have errors. Thank you for sharing your work.



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Review of Shed No Tears  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Shed No Tears Open in new Window. (E)
The Five Civilized Tribes were forced to relocate to Oklahoma, but they shed no tears
#1776715 by Sum1 Author IconMail Icon


*Waterdrop* "Shed No Tears," is an honest work of prose, giving voice to a horrible blood stained history, of early America. I have driven hundreds of miles up and down the Trail of Tears roads in Arkansas, and each time that I do, it takes no imagination to see the spirit way, and the masses of Earth People trudging along red clay roads, as your prose says, for "...A trek to lands that had been set aside." It was one phase of the attempted genocide of the Native Tribal People, which continues today.

The good news is: "...The only Indian Nation never to sign
A treaty with the White Man, they aren’t blind,
Kept their sovereignty intact to this date,
Never overcome by the United States..."

*PenBl* Overall: The pen is mightier than the sword, and this is true. I thank you for giving voice to an atrocity which has been until recent years, kept slightly hidden under all of the buffalo hides. I think these good words would get a novice to the notion interested, and for those of us who keep this in front of us, these words are a salve-like-medicine. No problems can be solved, if they are not discussed. It has taken over two hundred years, but all human beings are taking this to heart, and genocide is not okay.

*Waterdrop**Waterdrop*This review is more of an emotional reaction, because The Trail of Tears never leaves me. I burn smudge sticks whenever I go on the Trail of Tears.

*Heart* I love this work of prose, and I would not change a thing.


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Review of White Light  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I wish you could hear me clapping, and yelling, "Bravo," good job.

You made 55 words into a story of life, death, hope, and joy.

The chronological order of, an awakening of senses is very well done. "A light flickered, I walked that way." Simple but powerful. "Voices murmured," and then, "Cold air enveloped me."

Sight, sound and touch. Those are the basic elements required for a good work of writing, you included them all.

It is difficult to compile a complete story in 55 words, and you did it well.

Congratulations, and good luck.

Write On. *PenB*


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Review of Shape Shifter  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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""Shape Shifter" Open in new Window., " is an interesting word picture. I had never considered a muse as a Shape Shifter, but I do understand that the urge to write, and the sometimes insane objects, and prose which appear to a writer; and then become a command, to pour out of the ends of our hands, can be a taste of heaven, or a dipping into hell.

I love, "A shadow, passes in front of the sun, comes between my unwritten ideas and the orange juice I want to drink..." As writers who have answered the call of the muse(s), we do not know what form our creativity will take.

The imagery of "...the thorn of a rose, embedded in the the palm of my hand...a nail protruding from the ball of my foot...I cannot ignore it..."

In just a few words, you have drawn a portrait of a writer, ready to get down to business, she is simply waiting for her upload, that she must wrestle into place, and on to the pages.

Excellent Work.

Technicalities: Doing reviews for Moderators is a bit intimidating, as I see you all as higher life forms. There were a few things I found that could be changed, but most of the errors will probably be found in my review.
1. imbedded = embedded (spell checker found that one) 2. Innocent women = woman.



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Review of Paybacks....  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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"Paybacks...," is a very interesting piece. The imagery painted by the words you have used, come to a colorful, and three dimensional scene at the sea shore. From the entire Universe, to the small crab, down to the smallest speck of sand, the picture is complete.

There is a stream, and tide of people, there is a stream and tide of the ocean, and present, is an evolving seascape of how a sandcastle built by the children playing at the shore, used such mastery, skill and imagination when building their castle, that even though the kids have departed, their imaginary characters, do have voice, as the are pulled with each pebble of sand, back into the sea.

One of my favorite portions of the first sentence is: "...as the scuttling hermit crab greeting the waters rushing food within his clawed grasp went about his sideways travel wondering at the small creature caught up in his pincer." Vivid, vivid descriptions. I can see the whole thing in my imagination.

I think it is an amazing use of words, to pull off only two sentences in this article.

Write On.


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Review of The Twenty-Nine  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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"The Twenty-Nine," is a very well written story of a future of Earth that is roaring at us like a 12 Cylinder gasoline powered engine. I am emotionally moved by this story. As an environmental, and civil rights activists, I wanted to yell, fist up, "Heck Ya!" I agree with the tenets of your story although it is "fiction." The characters are taking on a good three dimensional look, I would like to know a little more about them.

A description or lines I was drawn to: "...she said cheerfully as she melted through the shrubbery, careful to not injure so much as a leaf. This was both one of the Bishnois principals and a survival skill." She melted through the shrubbery invokes many different images in my mind. Great lines.

In this short story format, you were able to relate a world event, that pokes attention toward the U.S. of 1830. There are many parallels to the Native American Removal. The many protests around the world right now, I love some of the slogans that we can read on Facebook and other social media. The reason for mentioning that is that lately there are many signs that read: "If Grandmother is protesting, you know things are messed up." When a pacifist finds themselves in a place of "righteous homicide action," this means, things in that world are messed up.

Excellent story. I found no typos, or grammatical errors. I would not change a thing.


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is a review of "Thank You SM SMs"

I want to say this is a beautiful project pulled off like the Mob, by Jeff Author Icon and many Writing.com Members. Many were in attendance throughout the 13th Birthday celebrations, it was a writers party, and through the whole thing StoryMistress, and StoryMaster, take time out of impossibly busy schedules to run this website, and writers platform.

At this late hour of 2013 we are experiencing upheaval around us. In our news we hear about global destruction, murder, theft, horror and madness in governments.

"How about some Writing.Com for Your Soul?"

Any person who has an ounce of "writer" in them views this video, they will be moved. There is so much gratitude and love expressed in this project and video, I am hoping it goes viral, because it is award winning.

Teamwork provided by Captain Jeff Author IconMail Icon - This shows the beauty, and creativity of the many contributors worldwide.

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This is a review of "Memories Are All We Have Left Now" for a Special Package gift. *GiftT*

I was drawn to the title due to the fact that I am getting older, and early memories are working their way to the surface. You know it is important to use a good title to draw a reader in. It worked, the hook is successful.

It is a sad occasion when a young person is taken. "Memories" gives honor, and helps to shut one door, so the next step of the journey without a beloved person can begin, until one day healing comes.

This prose contains comforting words of remembrance honoring his life and death. This follows the pattern of the steps of grieving. Your writing kept me interested until the end, and I did become emotionally moved from the topic.

Write on.

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Review of The Water Garden  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a review of "The Water Garden."

Visual appeal: I am attracted to patterns, and love to see the unique designs that flow through the white spaces. The shaping of the lines, turn into a cutout of paper dolls, a very tall woman in a dress. It has appeal. The rhythm of the words have good form. I am drawn to keep going back and re-reading. On each visit, I find something new, perhaps deeper meanings.

You draw good images with your descriptions. I sense a conversion to the surreal a bit when "...the stairs appear...the water going 'round...circles getting tighter...light reflecting..." that is okay, it may be a description of someone in the state of meditation. Water has a way of aiding in the calming needed to reach Nirvana.

This poem, or prose is well written, as well as visual appeal. You transport this reader to a beach she had visited several years ago. The Writing: your well chosen words, bring back the memory of ocean scents, cold sand, cool shells, and patterns. "...And on one stone there came a very tiny crow..." I am hooked on wanting to know more about this tiny crow, that arrives on a rock , in rushing waters.

When I first start out reading, I am thinking a creek, or stream as the body of water. When I realize it is the ocean, I have gone back and reread this several times.

This is an enjoyable work to read, and thank you for the pleasure. Write On!

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"The Chicken Nightmare" is a fun and crazy story. You started out the story with good action and suspense. Walking alone at night with keys buried in the deep bag, is a good form of tension. How many of us, in a hurry, have ended up in a frenzy digging, afraid we lost our keys. You really peak the interest, when after thinking she is safe in her home, there is a strange noise. I like the excellent descriptions of the nightmare sequence. The end is a twisted, twist! :0) I am smiling in horror.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Happy Anniversary!

"Georgia On His Mind" is indeed an extremely tragic story. I like the way you opened with him sucking on a peach pit, The tumultuous story is unfolded during his reminiscence and eating the lunch from Judy. It is difficult to cover a long space of time in a short story, but you did a very good job. Simple right? Find your true love in childhood, get married, have children, stay together for ever - yeah right, but life happens, and bad things happen to nice people.

The end of this story does allow a smooth continuation into a novel length story.

Technical: There a couple of typos. ", I think it should be latter part of...
:"... whoever thinks it can happen to them she thought..."

The story captured my interest from the start and kept it until the end. Bravo. Write On





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"A Guest for Thanksgiving" is an enjoyable story of the weirdness, and normality of families and their individuals. I can hear your voice being excited, chatting it up, going on like you are on the phone of web with a friend. Your line: "Thanks for sticking with me. I’m totally nervous, and laughing with you has helped a really lot..." helped verify that I was hearing you correctly. This is cheerful, and probably the best ending for a family Thanksgiving get-together, especially since your alien is so cute. Delightful and entertaining. This was a lot of fun. Thank you.



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Review of "Anne" Experience  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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"Anne Experience" is a beautiful and powerful tribute to Anne Waldman. Thank you for writing this powerful prose. Your seeing her perform, caused a ripple around, and through you, and now to me. I am so glad to learn of this powerful voice for the Manatee and humanity. I am forever changed from the ripple and tide you sent my way. I love learning, and I always want to hear someone using their voice in the powerful chant song - it affects the universe.

I wish you good tidings, and will be forever thankful that you turned me on to Anne Waldman. Namaste.

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Review of Fishbones  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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"Fishbones" Is an emotionally dark prose of sadness, but with a dangerous spark of something more. Having already been packed, the writer had intuition, and still tried. The line, "I will leave like a spent tornado", to me means she has been strong, been horrible, but as she goes, you will only see some visage of where she used to be. If the left person cared, they could find you in the dredges of the tide - But, the Bladderwrack (thank you for making me learn a new word today), is a seaweed of healing. You will be gone, but the one left behind will not be able to keep from memory of you.

Thursday's child, has far to go...why have I always focused on the child of woe?

Although there is sadness and leaving, a time of change and transition, there is a positive strength of the leave taker - a storm, if you will, who cannot be contained.

Write On!



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"Why I Write Children's Stories" is an inspiring article that not only answers the question of your title, but thoroughly and in a thoughtful way, you are teaching how dreams can come true. It is fortunate that as a teen you were so focused, and able to grasp "creativity" and "art" as a way of life. Being a problem child, meant breaking from your parental grasp, and seeking your own. It is their fault; they bought you the electric guitar! *ElecGuitar*

I am happy for your successes. It is gracious of you to share these dreams, and the way you went after them, making them become a reality. It is wonderful how you serenaded the woman of your dreams, had the family you craved, and finally, the way that you came up with stories for your girls, creating a kingdom of success for all of you. Success is not only money, and the new car, but happiness in your lot, and it sounds like you hit the jackpot; not by chance or luck, but because you created it.

Thank you for sharing this story of hope.

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Review of Hello, Kitty!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Honestly, when I first started reading "Hello Kitty", I was thinking, "This nice lady is going to take this pregnant cat in, who is going to end up having thirteen kittens..." The writing is good, the farting and snoring livened it up.

Then, instead of a typical clinging kittens become vampires saga, you twist the ending with a dog! Not only the dog startles the needy kitties away, but the amorous Mother cat, falls instantly for the pooch!

You pulled this story off like the mob. I know that writing for the prompts is a bit pressure filled, and writing next to other writers, going for the same contest is different than leisure writing. I am still chuckling over that ending.

Entertaining and unique.



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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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I love this story to pieces. For those of us who lived during the hey day of the Drive-In Movie, this brings back such memories. Your story invokes that niggling feeling in the back of my mind that always suspected the Drive-In was not the safest place to be. Someone would always get hurt, babies cried, cars with out of State tags, and the weird guy working the concession stands; you have it all.

This story could turn into a very cool scary movie.

**Technical questions - Time (?) When the story begins, 1975 Mustang (for a High School kid being able to drive a 1975 rag top mustang, when it was new is fairly rare, but I can see how you wanted it to stage time). At first I thought there was a contradiction, and I did research and found all of these things happened in 1975! Excellent, and difficult to do. Perhaps what threw me was the black & white television set, and the "Leave It to Beaver" reference, but they were popping in the 1970's as well, and many people still had black & white sets.

Thank you for this put together, and well written story. I will think about this for some time to come.

Write On.

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Review of A Real Life fable  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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For Lobelia is truly blessed Author Icon's, "A Real Life fable" Wow. I am out of breath from the "harried Mother's" schedule. I would have run screaming from the situation, but with the couple, who prove to be a valuable team, they seem to pull everything off so smoothly.

I enjoyed the very long sentences of the harried mother's daily activity, and they work in this situation, because this is what is happening in her life. I am glad to see a mate in a family who cares enough about those he loves, to make unpopular decisions. Since this is more of a personal testimony, than a "short-story", I would say it is good. Some may say that some of the sentences run-on, but there are times that is called for.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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"The Life of Silver" Open in new Window. is a very telling prose. The first thing I think about when a person describes their life as Silver, is an older person, who has silver or gray hair, a couple passing a Silver Anniversary. I absolutely love what you have done in describing unique characteristics that are indeed "silver colored", but this is a shinning, gleaming, powerful Silver that is aged and wise - not dulled. For each season, silver is a life giving, and enhancing hue. Very good descriptions, and this continues to keep my interest, and "Life of Silver" remains folded into the wrinkles of my brain.

Thank you.

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This is an interesting story, filled with historic references. You show your writing skill well, as you wove the words to fit the photo. It would not surprise me to learn you turned this into a full novel.

Feedback: Luke wiped the last of the gravy in the chipped plate...(maybe off?)
She could hear the fast breaths flowing over her...(hear his fast breaths, and feel them...)

These comments are only from a reader's point of view, and are not meant to diminish or demean in any form or fashion, the amazing writing displayed in this piece. Take it or leave it.

You are gifted. Write on.


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