I was a little confused by your last paragraph. If I understand the point you are trying to make, I might have written it this way.
I plan to look into the lives of well-known families and people found in the public eye, as I travel on in my quest for information on depression. It will be interesting to see some of what they have been through, and how they recovered, if they did recover.
Well written! Your description of the animals and the fields were written beautifully. Your words gave me a clear picture of your land. The only change I would make, would be to capitalize the g, in God. You mixed humor, patriotism, gratitude and simple interest, very well. I know there are many servicemen who would enjoy receiving your letter. My son is retiring from the Army, after 26 years of service and I know he'd have loved it!
I found myself to be disappointed when the end arrived! I'm just a newbie, but I think this was beautifully written and the humor could be totally believable. I happen to have family that had a home on a golf course. It almost sounded like some of the experiences theu had, when they sold their home! Scary, that they really do walk among us!
I found your rhyme lilting and easy to read. I adored both the humor and honesty, regarding the drunk. Life experiences can be so painful. I enjoyed your poem and actually felt the pain of living with a drunk, through your words. I'd say...keep writing!
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