Very good spelling and grammar throughout, and quite an interesting concept to write about. I don't think I've ever read anything quite like this short story in my lifetime! I like how you broke it down into parts, though some parts were rather short and may have been better of being combined with others...overall a very average story.
I have to admit, upon clicking the story I did NOT expect this type of literature.
Pardon me, it IS a good piece and shouldn't be down rated for it's genre. Very well detailed and quite well done, I really haven't read something so good from this 'alley' of the literary world of Writing.com. Good leading up to it, and an OK ending. Bravo sir!
This spoke to me. I feel sorry she left you dude, but remember, there are other people out there. You sound like a awesome dude, speshly leaving to protect our country.
Woah.
This poem really speaks as to what it means to be free. To have freedom, its probably one of the hardest goals to achieve, no matter who you are. Write on, 5/5 stars.
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