I don't know if this is a review for the chapter, or for the story, but I'm hoping it's just for the chapter. So I accidently posted it before I could edit it or anything so I'll put my edit in the review.
Get rid of the just in paragraph 4
Paragraph 6: He knew it wouldn't be too long, also get rid of the second accidental came.
Paragraph 10: The shelf with all the bottles not indent.
That's all for edits I think, and um, for a title, maybe: "Alone at last"?
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