just change the last line one spelling mistake!! really good poem nice flow and rhyming! Alot of emothion starts dark and gives the impression of healing as the poem goes on i assume that the second stanza is a metaphore for something cant put my finger on what! I love the way you emphasised I think it must be love instead of it must be love really shows the confusion of the situation in the writers mind (shows true emotion that can be seen by readers) The first and second line of the last stanza brings in other people (family and friends) as often is the case with love the more people there are the more complicated it becomes, dont understand the last line whether it be a metaphore for lonliness or someone who has been put away either way it allows the reader to want a little more info all in all a emototional and heartfelt poem
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