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Review by AnneL Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
Cute little poem, not sure the first paragraph adds to it.

Spelling mistakes -- bubbles, collapse
I think the word you are looking for may be sudsies, not suddies, could be wrong. :)

I would rethink 'each has it's own dimension', they are all 3D, or maybe 'each has it's own fractal dimension'?
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Review by AnneL Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the poem. At first reading, I thought 'out for number one' was referring to the subject when the subject, by the end, is the one that wants change. It's just my opinion that you may want to change that to others out for number one or all out for number one.
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