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Review by miblu (away) Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
LOL..great Idea, I enjoyed this, Nicole...
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Love the repetition, w/the slight (slight?! *Wink*!) change...from the 'tall blonde' to the 'short dark' ROFL!!! Really have something, here...glad to have found it!

Okay, you do have one little old typo...end of 1st paragraph..you forgot the 'was', 'when she (was) barely a foot away..."
Good Write, Nicole, though, clever, witty and Hey, Welcome to Writing.com!!!!!
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Review by miblu (away) Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
There is much here that is quite effective...
It has an angry quality, a sense of aimless loss...
May I suggest, so that you get yourself read checking out the Review Rendesvous Group in Pita Author IconMail Icon's portfolio...
I see that you are very new, here...welcome to writing.com...

This story is 'affecting', also...there are a few typos, and it, perhaps could use just a bit of looking over, but there is a LOT of raw truth in this and you really ought to be read...please do check out that group...I believe that you can win an upgrade, etc...and you have something, here that with some editing, fleshing out....IN MY OPINION...only, I am not an editor, I just am another person here, who found something intense here, and why not make it even more....
Thanks,
m.
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