This was a great start! The chapter was fun to read from start to finish and left me wanting more at the end. My only advice would be to work on "Show, don't tell." There were a few instances where I felt you could have gotten your point across through the character's actions instead of just telling the reader.
For instance, when you describe Izzy's love for sweets, instead of saying She was delighted when she found out that not only did it contain the usual alcohol, but it was also stocked with an assortment of sweets
You could say something like Her face brightened when she found out that not only did it contain the usual alcohol, but it was also stocked with an assortment of sweets
However, this is a very minor criticism. Overall, I find your writing quite enjoyable.
Can't wait for more!
Hikari Okami
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