This story is interesting and unpredictable. The setting was unusual. It's a good story but Samantha's character isn't very well developed and I really don't understand the ending. Perhaps you could develop them both a bit more. I'm not sure but were you aiming for a heaven and hell sort of ending? I'd like it if it was explained a little bit more.
This sonnet portrays what a person would imagine their first kiss would affect them, not just emotionally but also physically. You use wonderful descriptions. I love how you say "A hazy, crazy, crisp kaleidoscope ensnares your soul". Ensnares is such a magnificent word to use as it shows that you can't escape even at your very core.
Constructive criticism can help any writer to improve, therefore it is only fair to give some. This story appears to have excellent potential and could be quite interesting however, it lacks correct spellings and an element to draw the reader in and make them want to read more. My advice would be to add something to the piece that will amuse, intrigue or frighten the reader which could lead to them wanting to read on. You've made a good start though, keep it up!
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