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Review of The Movie Maker  
Review by Maddie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)
This short piece, The Movie Maker, encourages creativity, confidence, and self-expression. It focuses on the idea that anyone can take control of their own vision by becoming both the star and the director of their own movie. The message is uplifting and motivational, reminding creators that they have the power to choose their path, surround themselves with supportive people, and let their ideas shine.

The tone is positive and inspiring, especially for readers interested in creativity or storytelling. While the writing is simple, the message is clear: success takes effort, patience, and belief in yourself. Ending with encouragement and good wishes leaves the reader feeling motivated and empowered. Overall, the piece works well as a reminder to take risks, trust the process, and embrace creativity.


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Review by Maddie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)
This short story, Behind the Eight Ball, is about trying something new and discovering hidden confidence. The narrator shares their experience of going to a pool hall despite not being very good at pool at first. The details about waiting for a table, missing the shot, and being corrected by others make the story feel realistic and relatable. It shows that learning often comes with mistakes, especially when starting something unfamiliar.

The story’s main message focuses on growth, encouragement, and the importance of accepting help. Once the narrator learns the correct way to hold the pool stick, their confidence improves and so does their skill. The positive ending leaves the reader with a hopeful feeling and reinforces the idea that practice and guidance can lead to success. Overall, the story is simple, uplifting, and shows how stepping out of one’s comfort zone can lead to unexpected achievements.


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Review by Maddie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)
This poem is an emotional and powerful reflection on love, vulnerability, and loss. The speaker describes how trust slowly formed in a relationship and how feeling safe allowed them to become soft and open. The imagery of warmth, gentle hands, and silence helps show the gradual change in the relationship rather than stating it directly. The metaphor of the “glass girl” is especially effective because it represents fragility and emotional trust in a clear, memorable way.

As the poem continues, the tone shifts from comfort to pain, showing how silence and emotional distance can be just as damaging as obvious harm. The ending is intense and leaves a strong impression, emphasizing how deeply the relationship’s collapse affected the speaker. Overall, the poem is well-written, expressive, and thoughtful, with strong imagery and a clear emotional journey that makes the reader feel the speaker’s heartbreak.


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Review of The Fireplace  
Review by Maddie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)
The Fireplace is a short story about a family who gathers together on a cold night to stay warm. The story takes place in the Jackson household, where a family of six sits by the fireplace because of the cold weather. Everything seems normal at first, but suddenly a huge blaze bursts out of the fireplace and sets the furniture on fire.

The family quickly escapes outside and calls the police to report what happened. Thankfully, no one is hurt, and everyone survives the fire. Since their home is no longer safe, a neighbor nearby lets the family stay at their house for a few nights while the fireplace is being fixed. Overall, the story shows how dangerous accidents can happen suddenly, but it also highlights the importance of family safety and supportive neighbors.

Quick feedback

👍 Good clear beginning, middle, and end

👍 The main event (the fire) is easy to understand

🔧 Watch run-on sentences and repeated words

🔧 Adding a little more emotion (fear, relief) would make it even stronger


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Review of Recognition  
Review by Maddie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (5.0)
Hi there,
“Daily” reads like a raw, unfiltered release of spiritual frustration and resilience. The poem blends exhaustion with faith, showing a speaker who is repeatedly tested by negativity but refuses to be pulled off course. Lines about lethargy, energy, and vibration give the piece a modern, almost metaphysical feel, suggesting that emotional and spiritual states are contagious and powerful. The repeated references to time, awakening, and endurance reinforce the sense of a daily battle that must be consciously survived.

What stands out most is the tension between external conflict and internal grounding. The speaker acknowledges provocation, betrayal, and dismissal by others, yet repeatedly returns to faith as an anchor. God is portrayed not as distant, but as actively guiding restraint and purpose. This contrast strengthens the poem’s message: power does not come from reacting, but from refusing to be drained. The imagery of energy being removed and others “shattering” flips traditional power dynamics, reframing silence and withdrawal as strength rather than weakness.

Overall, “Daily” feels confrontational yet controlled, accusatory yet reflective. It speaks to burnout, spiritual vigilance, and the cost of being underestimated. The poem’s force lies in its conviction—its refusal to soften its truth—making it feel less like a performance and more like a personal reckoning put into words.


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Review of Sloth  
Review by Maddie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ ★★★★★ | (5.0)
Hi there,

Review of “Sloth”

“Sloth” is a clever and unsettling short story that begins like a familiar, almost cozy anecdote about pets and slowly transforms into something far darker. The casual, conversational narration lulls the reader into a sense of normalcy, making the eventual supernatural turn feel more disturbing. By grounding the story in everyday experiences—lost pets, family routines, minor neighborhood conflicts—the author makes the horror feel intimate and personal rather than distant or fantastical.

One of the story’s strongest elements is its pacing. The disappearance and return of Brutus is handled patiently, allowing suspicion and unease to build naturally. The narrator’s rational attempts to explain Brutus’s behavior mirror how most people respond to strange situations, which makes the eventual revelation more believable. When Brutus reappears changed—physically present but emotionally absent—the shift is subtle yet deeply unsettling. His apathy is more frightening than aggression would have been, signaling that something fundamental is wrong.

The introduction of Sloth as a literal embodiment of the sin is both imaginative and effective. Instead of dramatic violence or chaos, the threat is exhaustion, indifference, and decay. This choice makes the horror psychological and existential. Sloth’s dialogue is chilling precisely because of its boredom and certainty; there is no rage or urgency, only inevitability. The idea that lethargy itself can be contagious and fatal is an especially strong metaphor for depression, burnout, and complacency.

The ending is particularly effective in its restraint. Rather than offering resolution, it leaves the reader suspended in the same paralysis that has overtaken the narrator. The final moment reinforces the theme that inaction can be as deadly as action, and perhaps harder to resist.

Overall, “Sloth” is a thoughtful, original piece of horror that succeeds through atmosphere, symbolism, and slow-building dread rather than shock. It lingers in the reader’s mind, which is exactly what good horror should do.


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Review by Maddie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ ★★★★★ | (5.0)
1. Overall Impression:
I really enjoyed your story overall. The atmosphere you created pulled me in right away, and the tension between the characters kept the scenes feeling alive. You have a talent for balancing action, emotion, and mood in a way that makes the reader want to keep going. The tone feels consistent and intentional, and it’s clear you put a lot of thought into how each moment builds off the one before it.

2. Character Development:
Your characters have strong voices and personalities, which makes them stand out. Pierce, Jace, and Niko each feel distinct, and you do a great job showing their motives through behavior instead of just explaining them. I especially like the way small actions reveal their dynamic — it hints at deeper backstory without overloading the reader. If you ever expand this, exploring their internal conflicts even more could add even more depth, but what you have now already works really well.

3. Dialogue:
The dialogue feels natural and fits the personalities of each character. You also use it effectively to build tension — especially in moments where characters don’t say everything openly but their tone and reactions carry meaning. The balance between spoken lines and inner thoughts is smooth, and you avoid info-dumping while still revealing important details. It’s paced well and makes the interactions believable.

4. Pacing:
The pacing is one of the strongest parts. You move quickly enough to keep the story engaging, but not so fast that scenes feel rushed. The way you shift between quieter moments and high-energy ones keeps the story dynamic. You also time your reveals well, letting information unfold piece by piece. Nothing dragged, and nothing felt too abrupt.

5. Worldbuilding and Atmosphere:
The atmosphere is rich without being overwhelming. You give just enough environmental detail for the reader to picture the setting, but you keep the focus on the characters and their interactions. The supernatural elements feel grounded and believable within the world you created. If you ever want to expand the worldbuilding, adding a few hints about the rules or history of the supernatural parts could be interesting, but what’s here already works.

6. Emotional Intensity:
You handle emotional tension carefully and effectively. The story never crosses into graphic territory, but the vibes, reactions, and character dynamics still deliver a strong sense of intensity. It feels intentional rather than accidental, and the restraint actually makes the scenes stronger. This level of emotional weight is part of why the story comes across as more mature, in a really skillful way.

7. Rating Suggestion:
Because of that emotional maturity — the intense physical closeness, the predatory supernatural energy, and the violence tied to strong emotional moments — I do think the story fits better with a 16+ or 18+ rating, even without explicit sexual content. The tone is older-teen. I really just don’t want Writing.com to step in and change the rating on their own, because once they do that, you usually can’t switch it back. If you choose a slightly higher rating yourself, you keep full control and avoid any moderation issues.

8. Final Thoughts:
Overall, this is a strong piece of writing with clear vision, compelling characters, and a distinct voice. You balance emotion, action, and atmosphere extremely well, and the story feels polished and intentional. With a slightly updated rating, I think it would be perfectly set up for readers who appreciate older-teen paranormal fiction. You clearly have talent, and this story shows it.


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Review by Maddie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ ★★★★★ | (3.5)
This is an amazing book. Maybe could you tell me more about the characters but other than that I love it! It was a great book for you not being the type to write romance. I am a romance enthusiast and write romantic books all the time! So, I definitely enjoyed reading this book! I just wrote a book called "Devil in Details" and I would really appreciate it if you could review it for me. It is a sad book but It would really mak my day to have someone review it for me. Thank you for your time and consideration!
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