This poem has got me wondering 'Who is Ariadne?' Really, any poem that makes me ask questions has got to be good. I'm not easily interested.
I really liked this poem. It was different, and said a lot in a short amount of words. This is definitely a piece worth rereading. . .Which I think I will do right now! I really enjoyed this.
Ooo, an intriguing letter! It was interesting and very neat. It wasn't your best work, but your best work is really good. I didn't find any errors at all, so on that front everything seems kosher. It’s a very nice change of pace, and I think this is a very cool addition to your port.
*gives a standing ovation to this wonderful piece of literature*
I’ve never been good with dialogue, and seeing this piece, that was fully sustained only by the dialogue blew my mind! It was sweet and very lovey-dovey, a kind of romance I enjoy after a good angsty story.
I’m more then just a little envious of your talent with dialogue. I don’t know where it all came from, but I sure hope you continue sharing your stories with everyone at W.com. They’ll be grateful, I know I am!
Ah, and I thought I was the queen of angst. I have to admit, I’m a bit addicted to your sweetly sorrowful stories. This one in particular hit me where it hurts. I could almost see her misty downcast eyes as she ran her hands over the tombstones.
I think I’ve complimented you out the wazoo, so much so that my wazoo is now quite tired, so I’ll keep is short.
I loved this piece, so please keep up the great work.
Hmm, I’m sensing a pattern here? Anyway, it was a good story. Sad in its own way, but it did have a semi-hopeful ending. What I can’t help wondering is, did Jonathan intentionally get her pregnant? He seemed pretty happy about it for a teenage boy. Maybe he was just the fatherly type. . .*falls into deep contemplation*
Anyway, I can’t deny that you can put a new twist on an ongoing theme. I really enjoyed this piece.
*applauds* Good for you! This has to be my favorite of the works I've read!
I was drawn in and really want to lay into that nameless man too! How dare he treat you like that! *ahem*
Well, I really liked this poem and enjoyed it. I think it would have had a bit more order if you seperated it into stanzas, but it's fine the way it is.
Great job! Keep up the great work!
Mary~
Just Pilliaging!
Yo ho ho and really bad eggs!
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Once again, an interesting piece! You did a great job getting your feelings across, and for that its a sucess. The timing was a bit awkward, but other then that I loved it. The sheer emotion and feeling you put into it. . .I commend you for having the courage to put something so personal up!
Keep writing!
Mary~
Just Pilliaging!
Yo ho ho and really bad eggs!
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Another heart wrenching poem. . I just want to reach out and protect this innocent child from harm. You did a great job getting the reader hooked into the story and characters your poem portrayed.
I found no mistakes, and think you did supurbly in your editing.
I am astonded by your talent. You really do have a gift Sarah, and I hope that you quit doubting yourself.
I love this contest! The idea is interesting, and you even managed to keep this making some sense, which is a difficult thing to do with something like this. I was really amused at how some of this came out and it gave me some good laughs. Adding to it is fun too!
Creepy. Super I'm hiding in my bed with all the lights on creepy. I loved it and now I don't think I'll sleep for days. You're use of launguage and speech was perfect and your choice of words were right on. You conveyed your story with eerie perfection that makes me jelous. You were able to give me goosebumps and really think I saw things. . . I'm still creeped out so. . .
That was great! *rolls on the floor laughing* Grammar has never been my strong suit.
*cough*
Okay, I am an absolute baffoon when it comes to spelling and grammar, (as you will probably notice in my review) but, it seems I complain about it anyway.
I mean, there are less and less people using good grammar these days.
*evil grin*
No, I'm not that stupid, I just added that to keep you on your toes. (and annoy you) Anyway, I want to praise you for sticking up for all the nerds and people who complain about good grammar. (My brother had dubbed them 'bitchers', but who cares what he thinks? )
More power to you buddy!
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Ah, and I thought I was the queen of angst. I have to admit, I’m a bit addicted to your sweetly sorrowful stories. This one in particular hit me where it hurts. I could almost see her misty downcast eyes as she ran her hands over the tombstones. 
I've never seen such a big butterfly! Its so neat! 