Interesting story, but why the bold words? At the end I've got the idea you're referring to the Bible, it sounds like a Christian message, but it is a little veiled. I'm afraid I lack suspense in your story, there is a lot of mystery but little of it is really solved. Maybe elaborate the story a little bit?
What a lovely story! Well-written, with a good balance between creative description and action, it suprised me from beginning to end. I think it was a pretty original story, especially the way you wrapped it up at the end. It shows a talented writer!
It's beautiful! I love the imagery, I can see it before me and I think that's the greatest thing about poetry: the ability to capture and instant and give it life into the reader's imagination! Just beautiful, like the lilies :)
I know what you mean, I'm also introverted inside and outside the web, it really isn't easy to find new people! I'm looking forward to reading your work, I'm also into YA fantasy!
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