Your poem is very good and I am glad that I got to read it. It's a heartbreaker but I got the feeling you moved on, which is a good thing. Thank you for sharing it.
I applaud you for your understanding, being gay is not a choice. I think it would have been easier to accept if my husband left for another man, but sadly it was for another woman. We had been married 34 years, and divorced a year ago.
If this is your autobiography, you have a good start, ok, in your 3rd paragraph, first sentence, it is kind of confusing. Reread it, rewrite it. You have a good start here and it was interesting, but I know your life hasn't stopped there. Check your spelling and keep on writing.
That was most everything in a nutshell about the brain. Short and accurate. Not much else to say unless you want to expand with scientific facts and more philosophical words. If this is a poem, then it is a good one, and I enjoyed.
This is good, and I think you could have taken it farther--made it longer, you have a dreamy children's story here that children would imagine themselves as the participant. It is like the stories I use to read as a child. Take it to the next step, it's good.
I can relate to this on one level. This is good. I like it. I think you have captured the frustration, fear, and lonliness of a lot of people. In the end you give positive thought and that makes this poem reach out. Yes, I like it very much. Keep up the good work.
Congratulations. You expressed yourself well. To open yourself to the world is a scary thing, but that is what writers do. So don't stop now, keep on writing.
Great poem! I can only think of one thing that could be done and that is take the word 'sometimes' out. you don't need it. Reason being, you have 'but other times, which leads into the sun overpowering the moon. It's like saying it twice, so it's redundant. Keep up the good writing.
This is good, however, there is one line I did not quite understand. "The mature to whisper sweat some things of lives that mattered." Other then that, it was deep and emotional. Keep up the good writing.
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