First off, not to sound picky, but I noticed a grammatical error, "They didn’t go a home a different way this time" (the a should not be there), the error is very small, but I just thought I would mention it.
Second, this story is probably the best story I have read on Writing.com so far, I mean that. It is sad in some parts, but that makes it all the more realistic, and very, very heartwarming, a great feel good story for the whole family! You should definitely look into publishing this. Excellent job! A+
I love this story. Great job, but it is missing something at the end. Perhaps you could do a second part, but up to you. It might be more fun though if you have the boy actually turn into a demon at the end (and his family as well if they did attempt to save him), but again, up to you, your story. I still enjoyed reading it though. Kudos!
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