I believe you can use the "product review" template under "create new item" for books as well. Just a suggestion....
You did a good job here. It is an intriguing review and makes me want to read the book to find out more. I think the run on sentences can be chopped up better.
I am a casual reviewer who gives mostly my opinion. Basically I know what I like.
Structure: when you first look at it you think it is a poem. when you realize it is not the standard rhyming type, you are pleasantly surprised
Subject matter: How many of us are no longer willing to take a man at his word? This piece gives us hope that there might just be men worthy of it still out there.
Overall impression: A short choppy piece, but one definitely worth taking a look at.
Notes: There were no spelling or grammatical errors detected.
Starts out good so far. It leaves a lot of questions though. What kind of friend? What kind of relationship do you have? What gender is this friend? I'm left with all sorts of possibilities floating around my head.
Like I said though. A good beginning. You don't have to be an open book like me.
Cute story. I would correct some of your grammar, but it fits your character's cadence. I like this story a lot. The way it is told makes it all the more entertaining. It may not fit everyone's tastes, but as I have said, I like it....
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One slight misplace that I see.... Your E line first word is not the start of the line. I would suggest moving it to Everyone and just delete "as we enter the final stages of the month". Just the opinion of a fellow poet (even though I don't write much of it anymore)
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An honest look at love from someone who was never taught how to.
Leaves me wondering if the author ever found that selflove that comes before any other kind. To be loved and accepted one must believe they are worthy of it. That is a personal step that no one can take for you.
I hope that you find contentment with yourself at the very least.
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I remember stuff like that for different holidays. Me and my friends used to run through the neighborhood with scissors asking at each house with flowers if we could cut some to give to our Mothers for their day. At the end of the block was a huge lilac bush that we knew we didn't have to ask for, so our Mothers got mostly lilacs. We would go down and take bunches when we were in trouble to say that we were sorry.....
I find myself wondering about things, like if Johnny has a job and is his drinking affecting that as well. I see a hard boiled detective or a private eye. I also wonder how old Colby is and a few things about Susan.
You caught my interest but this needs to be more than a short story....
This was......interesting, to say the least. I don't think I'll ever hear of white albino naked lab mice the same again, nor will I stop wondering about the attraction of rubbing them on one's head.
It is a very cute story.
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