Cute little poem, though excessive rhyming tends to get a little monotonous after a while in poetry, but it worked for what you were writing about.
The orange and door hinge comparison was pretty clever, but I would have liked it even more if what you were comparing yourself too had more relevance to the content of the poem other than just exemplifying originality. You could probably find a more encompassing metaphor.
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