I agree with some of the sentiments in this piece of poetry. Bullying is a scourge and it exists everywhere. "Such behavior's just savage." "The huge focus this draws!" Who has never met and/or endured a bully? This terrible behavior does attract attention, but bullies seem to thrive on it. Yes, bullying does engender hate. This is a thought-provoking poem. The rhymes are natural. Happy account anniversary.
The bones, the basis of a great story exist here. The formatting makes it difficult to read and to follow. The ends of sentences drift away, or are hidden. They peter out of sight. What did I miss? Does the father crash his vehicle into the tree? Is the text that follows an example of his injuries and his high emotional state re his daughter? He cannot speak clearly? What is this book she alludes to? What is she accusing him of? At the moment this is a jumble. Happy account anniversary.
I wrestle myself outside everyday for a walk and I have yet to be addressed by an advice giving fox, or any animal for that matter. The Potholder Lady should consider herself honoured to be blessed with that fox's wisdom. I do laugh at her idea of something important. Meh, we all have skills and interests to share. I suppose cooking safety is important and a priority for some people. Happy account anniversary.
I like how this story is told as a diary entry, a series of memories. Paige has much to remember and not all of it is sunshine and roses. This illustrates life can be both wonderful and agonizing. Wow, Paige leaves the reader hanging. She reveals a partial bombshell. and then bids her diary good night. What? I am intrigued/hooked. Happy account anniversary.
Yes, ugly, unfeeling cancer tends to take too much from its victims. This is an uplifting and joyous story. Yes, Carolina's hair deserted her, but the illness did not dim her sense of self and her exuberant imagination. Why not declare that you are vibrantly alive by wearing marvelous headwear? I can envision that colourful parade and the children strutting along.Happy account anniversary.
Haha! I love the premise of this story and the surprise reveal. I now know how effective a love potion can be. A man sidelined by his sudden love for an oak tree. Ooops indeed. I find no grammar or spelling issues. Thanks for this amusing image. This is a new take on the idea of being lovestruck. Happy account anniversary.
This is indeed a short story. It could almost be the beginning of a much longer tale. I see the potential for more. It raises so many questions. Who else does she observe and/or meet? Hannah seems to enjoy people watching and a laundromat would be a great viewing spot. I have noticed two things. "Or even at a friends house" should be or even at a friend's house. "Seperate" is spelled separate. Happy account anniversary.
What a waste of chocolate! Not just kids, but adults too, gorge themselves on the treats that are bad for them. I once had a senior client who would enjoy a tomato once a month despite having an allergy to tomatoes. She knew she would break out in hives, but she considered that a small price to pay. Ah, this poor father. He wished to make memories and they were certainly created. Children are nothing if surprising. Best laid plans are often scrapped. This was a great read! Happy account anniversary.
Oh, I understand your poem. No more clarity is needed. I know my autistic Cousin, Paul, or as well as someone can under the unique circumstances. Yes, he often lives in his own world and struggles to fit in. His various attempts to hold a job have become family legends, but they are a stark reality to him. I think of him as a perpetual teenager angry and confused, needing his parents but resenting them. He does have a driver's licence, but his comprehension of the rules is lacking. He doesn't seem to know what consequences are and things happen. Your love shines through in this poem. Autism does raise questions. Happy account anniversary.
I am not completely sure what you are describing or alluding to in this poem, but it is well-crafted. The rhyming is not forced and the lines flow. There is one awkward rhyme though. Toes and quotes have a partial, or similar rhyme. When I read this poem I sense it is a commentary about social media, but I could be wrong. Happy account anniversary.
I chose to read this poem because of the constant media crap featuring Trump that invades my news viewing. Yes, turning off the television is one solution all be it temporary. Media can be overwhelming. Too much of it is doom and gloom. Writing can be therapeutic, right? Happy account anniversary.
Whew, what a whirlwind of emotions. A climb to dizzying anticipation and a plummet to dark despair. I have questions. Why the enigmatic message? Did it hint at sudden desertion? Was it perhaps a suggestion to abandon the formal wedding and replace it with an elopement? It has a surprise happy ending. Happy account anniversary.
Awww, poor berated Monday. As the first day of the regular work/school week it has become the scapegoat. It represents our loathing to return to the grind. What must the other days of the week think? Relief? Admiation? Sympathy? As your poem describes, Monday is the beginning of planning. Happy account anniversary.
This is pure bathroom humour and I laughed throughout. You had my undivided attention right from the first words. How delightful the married bliss banter. Wouldn't we all prefer to believe we were not growing bigger, but the bathroom was inexplicably shrinking. The rhymes lend this poem a light-hearted air. Kudos for incorporating squandered into this piece. Happy account anniversary.
Well, this is a short and sweet story that answered the prompt. It clearly illustrates that being wordy is not necessary. Human nature is complicated and not always predictable. People are anything if not surprising. Many would still share their fortune without any regret. Happy account anniversary.
This was a delightful, fun, amusing and enlightening read. Within this story of an alien encounter I learned a wee bit about Philosophy. I have never before considered all the ramifications of this one not-so-simple English word know. Perhaps I hear it too often as a brush-off from people who are not actually listening or concentrating. They become dismissive with their untrue i knows. I commend you. This piece is well written and flows. I like your subtle humour as well. You have imagined how blase people could be with an alien encounter. Happy account anniversary.
You write eloquently of grief and anger. These two emotions are intertwined and support each other. You give them a raw, stubborn life. They demand so much of your attention and no doubt will reside with you forever. As a mother myself I know and understand the love and the expectations we pour into our children. A child so easily becomes our everything. A loss is an ugly, dark, deep void. My wish for you is that those whispers of "happy places" and heartfelt memories grow into a roar that drowns the anger and grief.
With this piece of nostalgic writing you describe a world foreign to me. Although as I write this I realize not completely different from my world. I do have an uncle who dabbles as a bootlegger of alcohol and cigarettes. Your papaw seems to have controlled a thriving business. He is quite the character. Imagine a connection to Dillinger? That would be a story. Happy account anniversary.
Pumpkins do seem to epitomize autumn. Somehow the pumpkin spice craze is a thing. You mention bold new recipes. In Cuba, pumpkin is served and eaten as a vegetable. For instance it is grated and cooked in omelets. It was delicious. I find the sight of pumpkins uplifting. Thanks for evoking warm memories. Happy account anniversary.
Thanks. I really enjoyed reading this rambling tale. Why not a visit from a pirate? It is as believable as the Santa saga. The grilling, er, questioning by the boy is also believable. There would be so much to ask a random pirate in your livingroom. The why is important. I found nothing to question myself. Thanks for the smile on my face. Happy account anniversary.
Obviously, you are a Rangers fan. You bleed as the saying goes red and blue. The rhythm for your haikus is steady and never wavers. You have created little picture vignettes here. I can imagine that the rink and its ice are difficult to ignore, or unsee. It's front and center waiting for the action to ensue on its surface. Yes, the fan cheering must echo. Happy account anniversary.
As I read this piece of writing I could see myself in this person's shoes trudging through the darkness and cold. There is a sense of both urgency and hesitation. Should the walker continue forward or turn around and leave? Returning home is not always a given, a surety. I like this phrase. "Looking out behind me the dark has made its stand." Yes, nightfall cannot be averted. Happy account anniversary.
I like the cadence, the rhyme and rhythm of this piece of poetry. It especially flows when spoken out loud. As someone who lives in a country of winter, I can say that nothing thwarts the deadly cold. There's no doubt that the freezing temps pair with love woes. The final curse is dramatic. Happy account anniversary.
I laughed my way through both of your scripts. A Mr. Blizzard! The featured kids are insightful and understand what happens when the mister packs for a trip. This would suit an animation. Weather can be unpredictable often whimsical. I like your fun possibilities. Thanks for sharing. Happy account anniversary.
As you explain silence is so many things. It embodies emotion. It reflects moods. It embraces thought. It can be good, or it can seem bad. Silence can safeguard emotions and it can distance people. It can stretch on for a long time. It seems infinite. That is the spelling by the way, not infinate. Keeping quiet can come at a cost and yes, it can become "uncomfortable silence." I do not understand this word "dwrves". Happy account anniversary.
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