GOOD STORY... no problems of spelling and grammar detected. I found it interesting and had a good twist. I found that the way it was presented was in a way I could relate to. I've been there and could relate to the more problematic zeals of life. Thanks for the story I did enjoy it.
interesting point of view... never thought of it from the pov of a deer. I thought it over all very heart warming and given a second look when i go deer hunting. No more of that shinola for me... This makes me think twice about hunting again.
Overall: Good grammar and spelling no issues detected.
Good story... a good vampire type story with a good suspense/horror factor and a really surprising ending. I thought overall that this might be used in a novel opening rather than just a story.
Overall written well with no grammar spelling or any technical issues.
I would like to say this is actually quite good, i found it very compelling and wanting to read on after every chapter. It is not often you find someone who is able to do an graphic novel or illustrated novel on an anime and able to pull it off. very well done i really did enjoy this entire novel. Even if it is ongoing i will keep reading.
I found no technical problems with it, and dialogue was easy to follow as was the plot.
I give this a 4 star solid review and really enjoyed the storyline. I am a big anime fan myself, mostly Aikira, Robotech, Voltron, Kite, Bleach, and Yamato as major ones i follow. So I definitely will add this one to my list.
nicely done, very good effort... good for the writer's cramp post here on WDC...
Overall good dialogue, grammar, no spelling problems and i like how you still can build up the action and still get the job done with not alot of writing.
I never tried something like this for writers cramp or something this short.. it's always been 1000-2000 words usually and still i have difficulties.
I appreciate this because you have shown me that a little effort you can accomplish. I might even take a whack at this and give it a try myself. My profound thanks for that.
if you find him you will find his power and he will teach you his word.
Only the most evil people really are sent to the lake of fire.
Everyone will fall short one way or another and it is up to the person to fix or repent for that short coming.
a very short-sighted poll.. no one really knows what is on the other end and what will happen between life and death... it is FAITH and belief that makes all the difference.
I found no overlying problems in the way of grammar or spelling errors.
It is refreshing that someone went this way and did an anime based theme in written form. Not too many people do this because of the often difficult story lines and plots related to this genre.
For this story, I found it very concise and clear, very easy to follow.
I am very familiar with anime and hentai type stories, but i personally have never tried writing one. The closest I ever got was based on a picture and the assignment was to write a story based on it.
Overall impression: Good, free flowing and good dialogue.
No Grammar/Spelling issues.
Things to change:
It jumps right into the story, and lacks a preface or an opening before the action actually starts.. something to warm up the person reading than jumping right into the "Meat and Potatoes" of writing. It overall is GOOD, as it is, just add an opening is all and i think you could improve... otherwise no other changes that that i could see..
What I liked: The story historical aspect of it, from the point of view of using history as a base for events in current life.
Don't read anything into this review: This is NOT a bad review... You have a good story here, and it can be improved. It is not a bad story... you have a lot of work to be done and i think it has alot of potential -- Capitalize on it and expand it and i think you have a winner here.
ooooh i like this, very intriguing... I hope there is more of this coming soon, it could be expanded into something more in depth...
Technically: No issues found
Grammar: No issues found
Spelling: No Issues found
What I liked: The depth of description and by your working painted a mental picture when reading along... I was able to follow quite well and mentally got a great picture of the story.
has not been here in three years, I hope I meet with the genre even through its mainly science fiction but it does have a main aspect of adventure and action in it as well.
"I may be a little rusty but certainly not untried." - Admiral James T. Kirk
(Star Trek: The motion Picture)
Grammar and all that: Excellent and free flowing...
I liked how in depth you went into the dating scene, although for me its been a good 25 years since I actually dated. So I am pushing a half a century old I can relate and been married twice. but even from a point a view of married it takes commitment and hard work to make it work between a couple. Otherwise it won't... Consider that.
loves this poem... great work... captures growing up from when you were young to the teen years of dating, first bar and driving... everything that captures how life really is...
Technically: No issues, Great prose and rhyme. Flows beautifully.
nice i liked the prose. i found nothing wrong technically with the poem and it my overall feeling was that of the nature of Robert Frost type Poem, (Which is my favorite poet) He shows us all the beauty of a scene, and the great vivid descriptions. It was just like his poetry style. Keep it up... poetry like that style will get you noticed... Great poem!
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