I enjoyed reading this-it was light and soothing with lovely imagery. A few lines needed editing especially in tense, such as blends to blend, "warmth my cheeks" to warm, "fireflies surrounds me to surround and "and gave me a wish" to she gave me a wish. I hope this helps!
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