First, thank you for reviewing and rating my poem! I'm glad that you find it thought-worthy.
I really like your short story; it is both poignant and touching for me to have read it, as I come from a broken home and I also pray to Jesus. And, like your character Charity, I was once a teenager dealing and coping with the aftermath of a divorce between my parents.
What I like about this short story are that it is well-written for its type and purpose; it was easy to read and comprehend; it was short and sweet and came right to the point; it was very believeable, like a day out of a real person's life; the situation and Charity's mother's advice are realistically and positively portrayed as much as possible for someone in Charity's position; hence, the realism is also very believeable; and,I think, most of all,it has a happy ending.
Given all these reasons, it is fair for me to say that--if your general audience is anything like me--your short story will be well-received. Also, there is not a single thing about it that I would change. Thus, you should feel fairly confident that it is ready for publication.
I hope I have given you my thoughts on your short story in time. If so, please let me know in a brief email to that effect, if you don't mind, and whether it has been accepted by your publisher for publication. Thanks for giving me the oppurtunity to read and to comment on your short story; and I hope my input will be of good use to you. Yours truly, Ngoc.
A nice sonnet! Its flow moves along very well and you could actually hear its near-perfect melody!
Your meter is not perfect as yet, because of accents on uneven-numbered syllables in places. But you do have the number of syllables right in every line that I counted; and all the lines of your quatrains follow the rhyme pattern of abab cdcd efef gg as demanded by the Shakespearean sonnet form, except for lines 9 and 11.
But I like your rhyming couplet--it ties the entire sonnet up quite well. And once more, the melody of the sonnet is near-perfect: the only thing that spoiled it for me was the imperfect rhyming of lines 9 and 11. If you had had a perfect rhyme for "storms" or for "shore" the melody would have been perfect, immaculate!
This is a very good sonnet, in my opinion! Except for the concerns I've mentioned, this is a near-perfect attempt. Well done and continue to Write On! Yours truly, Ngoc.
For those of us who are indeed a little timid or confused about giving out less than favorable--or even perfect--reviews, this is an excellent tool for guidance and moral reassurance! As a new member, I am very glad that I've "stumbled" on this item before I actually got around to rating fellow members' items.
Having read your item, I have a better idea of how to rate members' items with confidence and a clear conscience, secure in the knowledge that even my less than favorable ratings will be helpful to others and are in the best interests of serious poets and writers like myself. Also, I feel better knowing that my favorable ratings as a poet and writer will be well-deserved, so long as my fellow readers, poets, and writers judge my submissions by these guidelines. I, too, prefer honest evaluations that will help me over the long run over sweet and honeyed half-truths about my work that would serve only to give me false hope and a sense of complacency as a writer in the end. Of course, don't get me wrong--I love compliments and praise as much as the next guy or gal, but only when I know I deserve them for something well-written and done with painstaking care and thought.
I think this item serves its purpose quite well. It addresses its topic very practically without being wordy or overlong. At the same time, it settles the issue of rating without being vague or unclear and without leaving anything unaddressed. For new members and even established ones, this item is both thoughtful and immensely practical, with the potenial to save alot of members unnecessary misgivings and confusion. I hope my honest review does this item and its author the justice they deserve. Thank you. Ngoc M. Nguyen.
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