Wow! Fantastic piece! I'm not normally a poetry reader, but I read your poem down to the last line. Halfway through, I started to sing the piece, even. It's ironic, then, that this piece is so (grotesquely) beautiful, so sickeningly imprisoning, because you really can't stop reading it. I think it really makes a statement about beauty, from (i)her(/i) own point of view for once. I can't tell you how much I appreciate that sort of view on it.
As far as technicality, I was only a little confused at the one line-blank-one line scheme. I thought it could've worked well in stanza, too, and the document wouldn't have been as long. Especially since you did have some ideas that group together. However, I also appreciate that this scheme made a statement for your poem, sort of "cut it off" emotionally, like your Beauty was. The vocabulary worked for me; a piece like this doesn't need the fluffy filigree of an extended word choice to express that Beauty mesmerizes.
Otherwise, please keep up the good work! I really sung the whole piece, because the story came out so strong I just felt it. Write more of your "beautiful" poems!
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