Certainly this is an expression of of newest Love. The issue, in my opinion, is the length of the lines. The example I do not even think you need the first two lines unless you are trying to work in how difficult it can be to find love in a society that never seems to stop moving or working; if that's the case I think the mobile-phone is a great motif. If I were to edit the next few lines they may look something like this (I hope you get the idea, from here it is a simple matter of applying it throughout the piece):
I dial your familiar number
On my cellular phone.
Romantic greetings promptly answered,
Your voice, most grateful, as usual...
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