Hello There Van I have seen and read the article and completely disagree with your views and I don't think you have carried out a neutral research.
First of all, I make it clear that I ran is a shiite country, a branch of muslims like protestants. And they have many rules different from the majority muslims.
Secondly, muslims believe the Quran to be the word of god and though god didn't pick up a pen and write it but it is the word of god. And if yopu had done your research well Abubakar was the first Caliph and he did not write but all the great scholars who had byhearted the quran had put it in paper. Abubakar was apprehensive of doing this because the prophet couldn't do it in his lifetime. As soon as the word of god was delivered he didn't stay much long and departed.
And about the ruling that came later takes precedence over the first is probably true, but here you don't know which came first. You have to learn . And most of the aayah which talk about beheading or killing are regarding when in battlefield.
And to prove it when the prophet came victorious to Mecca , but when he came he passed the order to harm no one. He gave them the option to saty there and become muslim or leave.
You say non muslims are inferior to muslims. Thats a wrong assessment. Once a muslim and a jew had a dealing and the muslim backtracked , they quarelled and decided to go to the prophet and he gave the ruling in favor of the jew, then they went to Abubakar who again gave the ruling in favor of jew, then they went to Omer the second caliph, he said wait here. He went inside and brought a sword and chopped the head of the muslim. If it was the case like you said the it would have been the jew's head.
I can see that you are dutch and have shown the mentality by presenting distorted facts. About the great terrosrists attack, yes muslims have done them I don't denounce them neither do I approve them, but look at the muslims where they are fighting.
You know Osama was such a dangerous man then why did the CIA train him and sent him to Afghanistan. Before Saddam regime was thrown he was the green-eyed boy of US. Who provided the afghans with the weapons- Americans.
And you talk about killings, I think you don't read the news. Once a marriage party was blown and the bride and the groom were killed with several hundred realtives dead. And they say they were regrouping to attack. Atroious statement when not a single bullet was found any where near the marriage party. There was mass burial of muslims in chechenis and bosnia and how many came forward to show these pictures.
Look at whats happening at the guatanamo bay , don't you think it would anger any decent man's sentiments be it moderate or hardliner. Osama had asked the Us army to leave after the forst gulf war but they didn't and that ticked him off. You know not all of these men fighting are crazies and just want to end their life and thought a noble way. Osama is a millionare if not a billionare and he gave that all up and living in rugged terrains. WHY? psycho? I don;t think so.
Israel took hold of that country by doing the same kind of terrorists activities. And now when the people who want freedom do the same they are terrorists. Most of the places where muslims are fighting , they are fighting for freedom and when that is opposed in any way by other countries thats when the beans spill over and terrorists activities start.
Nexct time while writing I say you can do better with a well done research with neutral perspective, the you will do better. You have done the research or whatever with your on one point with your perspective and you found what you wanted not the whole story.
Its like " I am telling a lie, to save someone" but you wanted to hear the first part and went on ignoring the second part.
A truly genuine and nice poem. The content in this poem is of utmost importance. I think giving space between the lines was a good idea. The feel and the format of the poem is good and I think you have done a wonderful job here.
An inriguing and often touching story of a girl. Your narration seems good and you maintain a tight grip through out the story. In fact you tie the reader into reading the poor girl grow up.
But the best thing or stand out part of this story was its end, to be precise its last line.
NOTE: It does not have a fairy tale ending but have to read to believe how good the end was.( at least to the girl's point of view).
The opinions here expressed by poetess are claimed to be from her life or inspired for her personal life but here I have to say that painting a child of 9 years in such a way is not good. However bad a child may be but I think seeing is believing so you might say that I haven't seen her , but again I think you were wrong in painting a child in that way. It's kind of contradictory to your own poem where you talk about you foster children(a boy is included there)and here you talk about a foster daughter in a totally unexceptable way.
A genuinely touching poem and I feel most of the people who had been in a serious relationship would relate to this gem of a poem. The format and the rhyme is ever present but they take back seat to the emotions conveyed by the words.
Gem of a poem.
I think any hard working man(salesman) would definitely relate to this. The rhyming is evident and the poem has a salesman's perspective at place. For the keen eyes the format is not constant.
In the first stanza you have AABB but in the second you use the ABAC and through out the poem you keep flip-flopping.
But on the wholee this was a nice poem.
This has to be the longest poem I have read written by you Ann. And easily this has to be the poem which contains huige range of emotions and feelings then any poem of yours. In here you start from darkness and in the end reach a light, thats what is needed in life after all.
Ann this is very unique poem and told so in such a style. The matter here you talk about is one sided and said from hurted person's point of view. This poem has a new feel to it and I think you have done it brilliantly.
The best part of the poem is the last stanza or para and specially the last line.
This Ann is a first rate poem. The emotional tragedy and the voice of the deceased told in such a beautifull and encouraging way. The feel the format and the rhyme in the poem are just superb and don't think anyone can top that off except you.
Let more emotions flow and bring out a new rhyme from you.
A really interesting and unique premise. I must say I thoroughly enjoyed this post. The dialogues of the protaganist and the way she handles them is very light humored and good.
And the company she works for is another great novelty of this story and this is slightly in the wane of "guide to galaxy" .
A really perfect poem acting like a parable for todays world. This is free verse so I think rhyming was completely let go to make way the brilliantly told matter. The structure is solid and flow or continuation of the poem is consistent in its own way.
The way the preaching is done by using the examples of dogs is really unique and makes this poem much better.
"there will always
be a bigger dog come along that can mark higher"
This line in the second stanza is not right and may need change like an addition of "which comes along"
Have to give the credit to you, you will be peerefect for a newspaper who needs space fillers. You just seem to be churning out his stuff and so regularly without compremising the quality. This here to is the perfect example of your genius.
Keep writing.
A nice attempt at something different from the usual stuff. The snow and the weather in here more likely strikes a chord with the reader.
I did not find any spelling errors ( I didn't look with eagle eyes). But there is vast scope in improvement here.
First there are grammatical errors:
"... as I look at her again and my suspicions are confirmed-she’s no one who I know."
[ as I look at her again, my suspicions are confirmed. She is not someone I know.]
And there are still some errors like the one above and needs some rewriting.
Your narrative is a tad dull, even though it is cold in the story, you have to add something to the narrative so the reader is kept glued till the end.
An excellent poem with truly rich feelings incorporated in it. The format is nice and easy on the reader's mind. The rhyme is flowing and with emotions of different kind intersperced in it,we as a reader must feel compelled to hear that little voice you are talking about. The voice which we all at one time or the other must have heard but ingnored it.
Great poem. Keep up the good work.
This is a genuinely well researche and well analyzed articel from you Flower. The changing world and the more changing America the brother for democracy and freedom is doing such things knowingly or unknowingly.
Had I not been on a GP collecting spree for my membership renewal I would surely have sponsored this item.
A very good story told most brilliantly. This has to be the work of a story teller.
The story has a feel of old folk tales which is refreshing and only helps the atmosphere build in the story.
The way the story is written is good and it is fast paced. There is a kind of supressed suspense and the brisk pace makes the story for a good read.
Everyone with a thirst for old yet refreshing tales should give this one a try.
A very well written and perfectly rhyming poem . The poem being a little scary is true and has a mischievious lilt to it.Reads out like a Dracula telling his victims how he kills except the listeners have no idea.
This poem has every thing in it and from all the poems I have read written by Ann this is the most different and has its own distinct feature.
Ann is a prolific writer and have to say I have misjudged her more than one time but there is not doubt this is a really good poem.
You are a master vat writing if this piece of fiction is any thing to go about. The only regret is the title, I would say dont change it until you find some thing extra ordinary beacuse this deserves it. The way you write is more or less like a movie.
A writer is a good writer when he intertwines great writing with great story telling and the content automatically takes a back seat but here even the content is just brilliant I dont under stand the 4 star average rating but surely can see you continuing this fiction in much more brilliant way and surprising the writers as you go on writing.
I had found this on the sponcered page and was very apprehensive to read mainly because of the lame title.
That has top be one of the most imaginative and well written piece of fiction I have read here at writing.com. And Mark it seems your adept at writing such stuff.
The prologue is what they call the "hook" and it does what it is used to do get the reader hooked. A brilliant idea from you because the actual start seems to be slow and going no where.
As soon as Dan gets passed out and finds himself in the quarantine the story picks up some pace. The dialogues and the realationship between Dan and Pol is shown beautifully and the charcterization seems to be very good.
This piece of fiction reads as a fiction by some of the most famous authors works. A really good writing technique with the ability of brilliant story telling makes this a winner.
The poem was really nice and it seem Ann you can write about any body's feelings as though yours after all feelings are some thing we all share.
The pain you portrayed and so beautifully put the gruesome scene in front in this poem is excellent. One who didn't witness this can also relate to the dead bodies returning.
The structure of this poem is very nice and is longer than most of your work. And the rhyming is almost flawless.
I would have to say you are the champion writer here at expressing the emotions and loss felt by people any where and everwhere. I haven't found any thing wrong in this poem.
Another one of Ann's brilliant poem . It seems that she just can't stop writing.
The format of the poem works very well for the poem and it does rhyme nicely and is easy to understand the clarity in the message of the poem.
Honestly, I can't find much fault in it.
Ok another one of your breaking the mould poem.
It was a novel idea of telling a sort of short story in a poem.
But on the whole it doesn't have as much rhyming sweet sense to it and nothing much to write home about that is wrong.
This was a very nice poem but I didn't find it as goos as your other poems.
May be the structure was new and made me uneasy. The emotions are well extracted.
And there are a few words which do not rhyme as well, like the 'love' and 'above' don't rhyme really well.
But no complaining, On the whole worth a read.
I would have to say that this piece is a gem
Ann is a very good writer and this poem cum song has evrything going for it.
In Ann's poem I have never found much fault and this one is not an exception .
Keep up the good work and keep it coming.
Ann I have been reading your poems more often be it for GPs but you are one author or poet who just keeps churning good work.
Not many can create so much work with out losing quality. You have written so much yet your finese is always there for every one to see.
A beautiful poem with nothing wrong in it, except a few line like the last line in the first stanza don't quite gel or may be they don't rhyme as well as the other lines.
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