Very enjoyable piece to read, I found myself with mental images of the situation you describe.
A bit of a grammer mistake I noticed: when you say "and he does not seem like cares" this needs a *he* in there before cares. Or you could say *and he does not seem to care*
And the very next line seems to be mis-worded... (< if mis-worded is a word lol)
Anyways... I knew what you meant and enjoyed reading the piece.
The only time I ever write my poetry is when I am thinking and I just write stuff down... This piece makes me want to maybe try writing something more simple that doesnt rhyme...
Well thanks for shareing :^)
Peace.
This is a very interesting piece of writing. I know what you mean as I have an iphone and all of my poems i've written have been done on it. I actually turned off the spellcheck setting because I found it annoying when trying to text friends... I totally get what you're saying tho!
Peace.
Jake.
Omg this is absolutely AMAZING!!! i feel like i could have writen basicly the exact same thing if i had the skill that you do...
Seriously reading this really touched me, i could totally feel what you are going through! I would like to be able to give you some advice on all of this.. But im in the same situation as you are and i basicly feel lost, not knowing whats important or who i am anymore...
This has really inspired me to write somewhat of a break down on what im going through and maybe step aside from the poetry for a minute.
Thank you so much for sharing such a deep and amazing piece!
Thanks again also for reviewing my work, im really glad you liked it :^)
stay strong and keep writing!
Peace and love.
Jake.
This is a very nice piece. I think everyone should have someone like that, that they can call their BEST friend.
A few spelling mistakes- on the first line where you say- “ year " i think you mean *years* plural... And when you say “ I ever find out anyone huts you" im pretty sure you meant *hurts*
But ya its a nice piece, im sure your friend is very lucky to have you.
Peace. :^)
Wow you are clearly an amazing writer... Your writing inspires me to maybe start writing some stuff that doesnt rhyme... Altho i like to rhyme..
Only one mistake that i noticed... In the line “In a smootly swaying hammock" i think you meant to *smoothly*
Exellent piece :^)
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