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Review by olgoat Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I see you see the value of the tree. I enjoyed the rhyme and the feeling this initiated.
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Review of Lesson  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
I like the story but the dialog seems a bit contrived. Maybe if there was less explanation and more letting the reader figure it out. My sisters were both difficult. Good story
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Review of Aloneness  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I really like this. There is a huge difference between aloneness and being lonely. In today's world, it won't be long before being alone will be a crime.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Sometimes all you need is the familiar to make your words ding - that connection here is quite palpable. could go after more feelings about the situation. But nice
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Review of Headstones  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (2.5)
A path often not taken. I like illusions. A new twist on a real them The last two lines are big. I think they need work and it will make the poem
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Review of school  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
it is difficult to be a thinker in a sea of repeaters. Don't give up respect others but be yourself - you will see in the end.
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Review by olgoat Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.5)
This has meat to it. It feels that you are trying too hard. the feelings washover me. sometimes too many words is bad. eg.

somewhere a child lies alone
beyond where the eye sees

the ear can't hear
the hand doesn't feel

Alone

more is often less
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Review of Cynic In Love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I like this. "the cynic into a believer" Nice! But you knew that. well said.
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Review of Stripping Down  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Pain and love different sides of the same coin. But it is not a gamble - all who love will at some time be in pain. This poem took me there. thanks
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Review of Gracious Death  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
this brought thoughts and feelings of the past. A bittersweet picture, as is life. I know some felt nostalgia and some jealousy. Thanks for the memories.
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Review of He is different.  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Ths rips at the heart - both share the sickness between them. all conspires to keep the devil they know between them. I have seen this before. There is no nobility in victimhood. But the poem is real - so is the pain.
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Review by olgoat Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
appropriately bitter to my mind - well written I enjoyed that it took no prisoners There is altogether too much pomp with no circumstance
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Review by olgoat Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
I like the descriptions nicely done but doesn't classic haiku only have 17 syllables? Doesn't matter I like it anyway.
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Review of Haiku for you!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
very nice - all about feelings not thoughts (what I think)

The first frost chills all
Fall wonders what will come next
Winter waits to start
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Review by olgoat Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
all feedback is tanted by the desire to be something more than normal Look around normal is anything but. Normal is a blessed condition.
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Review of The wind  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
an intense picture - the invisible wind and intoxicating fury - nice images
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Review by olgoat Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
I love the gift of yourself it is all anyone can give and so sweet, like this note you wrote
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Review of Spammy Diet  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
you are very clever and insightful and as Burns said OH what a gift he gee us to see ourselfs as others see us.
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Review of Grandpa  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
No behave of all lod men some who have been lucky enough to be grandpas Thanks. It is ok to be old and to feel that you have been left behind - that's life. Thanks for seeing us. WE love you.

Nicely written
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Review by olgoat Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
today is so much better than yesterday - you know that. If you must cry - then cry so that the world must tread water in your tears. Shake the reet of us. You can. I hear it in your voice
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Review of LIFE IS OURS  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Sounds like you have some bitterness to deal with. I understand that. But I am old. To you, it must seem endless pain and lie after lie. It can be. but you have a mind you think. Your thoughts on paper or here or both could help the rest of us. Please try - we need you.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
I like this but I think it needs more focus on where the writer is now not where they have been memories and the present is what builds the future - just my thoughts
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Review of I'm still me  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
nice insight - age, not the six gun is the great leveler. You made me look at where I am and be grateful for each unclouded day. thanks for that and good job. More deepth with less concern for rhyme would be good.
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Review by olgoat Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Wow. Never heard it said better. So many don't see what you do. They live in shallow water and can't imagine the depth of what has been given. thanks, I don't get the awards thing but have some points.
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Review of Ode to Surgery  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (2.0)
interesting thoughts but needs more effort - I would suggest ore meat on these bones but a good start
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