I like the story but the dialog seems a bit contrived. Maybe if there was less explanation and more letting the reader figure it out. My sisters were both difficult. Good story
I really like this. There is a huge difference between aloneness and being lonely. In today's world, it won't be long before being alone will be a crime.
Sometimes all you need is the familiar to make your words ding - that connection here is quite palpable. could go after more feelings about the situation. But nice
this brought thoughts and feelings of the past. A bittersweet picture, as is life. I know some felt nostalgia and some jealousy. Thanks for the memories.
Ths rips at the heart - both share the sickness between them. all conspires to keep the devil they know between them. I have seen this before. There is no nobility in victimhood. But the poem is real - so is the pain.
No behave of all lod men some who have been lucky enough to be grandpas Thanks. It is ok to be old and to feel that you have been left behind - that's life. Thanks for seeing us. WE love you.
today is so much better than yesterday - you know that. If you must cry - then cry so that the world must tread water in your tears. Shake the reet of us. You can. I hear it in your voice
Sounds like you have some bitterness to deal with. I understand that. But I am old. To you, it must seem endless pain and lie after lie. It can be. but you have a mind you think. Your thoughts on paper or here or both could help the rest of us. Please try - we need you.
I like this but I think it needs more focus on where the writer is now not where they have been memories and the present is what builds the future - just my thoughts
nice insight - age, not the six gun is the great leveler. You made me look at where I am and be grateful for each unclouded day. thanks for that and good job. More deepth with less concern for rhyme would be good.
Wow. Never heard it said better. So many don't see what you do. They live in shallow water and can't imagine the depth of what has been given. thanks, I don't get the awards thing but have some points.
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