This kept me riveted. Anybody who has had children can relate to the dread of the mother. Very nicely done! What must have been on her mind to distract her so much? I can see a serious story brewing.
My mother died from Alzheimers two years ago. I can relate to the feelings you have expressed. I would like to think that in their minds the view of where they are is perhaps a bit brighter...but who knows. I know my mother would smile when I brought in her cat for a visit and she put her hands on his fur and he pushed at her with his head. She was always happy to see me even when she would ask who I was. Such a strange disease and so hard on everybody.
If you have Alzheimers and wrote this poem I must say it is a remarkable look inward and onward. Thank you for writing it as it is how we children were feeling as we watched her progress. A horrible disease to deal with alone. Even when you are together you, and they, feel alone somehow. Very moving for me, I must say.
Yep. Waterfront, especially beaches with swimmers and bikinis is highly valued. And if enough of us go to visit it we'll surely wreck it. We can go home though and be safe. We can't afford to live on the water. We can still contribute to water's demise from afar with our demanding lifestyles.
This poem hits our condition right between the eyes. Somehow we still don't connect "us" to the life of the planet. We just drive away after we visit the scenes of our latest scarring.
This is a very touching story. I looked after my mother and father in their last years and I met many older people who seemed quite content with where they were at in life. Until my mother lost her mind to Alzheimers she was like this old man. Content with her life and wanting to join my dad after he passed. I really can relate to this.
I have never thought much about poetry. When I have thought about it, I thought it was a complicated and compressed way of saying something that a philosopher type would say in 10,000 words or so. But I am learning and appreciate this viewpoint, which is scary, but gives me the idea that maybe I could explore the area of poetry. I wonder if I can be that open after a lifetime of hiding feelings.
Cute and contains some useful information. The part about relaxing sounds the best. I'm doing that first. I'll be back in a while.
OK! I'm back.
I have made a decision. I am going to stick to this reading and writing stuff as long as it does not become like my old job was. The old job became predictable and not fun (mainly because I could no longer do it well).
I thank the author for the encouragement. And particularly for the "rule" to relax.
This story leads me to want to know more about the characters. What are details of their past? I thoroughly enjoyed the writing and would hope to see a longer version some time.
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