Well done! I'm not a poet, so I'm not sure the best way to critique. But I can say that I can empathize with the sentiments completely. It came across well. I feel like there might be ways to strengthen it even more, but due to my lack of expertise in this area I'm sorry I can't give you specifics. I think it is a solid start for a beautiful piece.
Great job and a beautiful message. I also sometimes struggle with trying to remember that my will is not God's will...and the importance of having faith in that His will is all that matters.
God continues to be faithful to me and I just need to try to remember to be as faithful to him as I should.
Well done!
I really enjoyed your story. Great message. And even with a short story you were able to capture the characters and bring the scenes to life. Well done!
~Rachel
I loved it! Really cute and funny. I would suggest changing the period to a question mark on "Well, you know what little blinking, soulless, heartless cursor?" I would also maybe take one of the two "little" words out. And maybe change the "name you" to "dub you". But I loved it truly! Well done!
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