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Review Style
I mainly look at the story/narrative as a whole, but I am a bit of a stickler for grammar. I will happily list everything I liked about what I read, but will rarely say I truly disliked something. I will also try and point you in some directions if I think any are good. I'm always going to honest.
I'm good at...
I'm good at finding mistakes and bouncing ideas. I'm quite literally certified in my state as a talented student writer (meaning I'm one of the top 50). This mainly comes from my technical writing, but it applies to my creative as well.
Favorite Genres
no true favorites, but I do love espionage.
Least Favorite Genres
overly-cheesy romance.
I will not review...
I won't review porn, simply enough. There is some poetry I have a hard time reviewing, especially if a meaning cannot be deciphered.
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Review of Poets and Paupers  Open in new Window.
Review by M. Gene McCoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your imagery here is beyond fantastic. You effortlessly switch from the perplexities of the cosmos to the dime-bag of a pauper, and from there explain that you are rich in ways not measurable thanks to the greats (I personally would've chosen a few different poets to discuss the greats [Byron for instance] but I understand that you probably chose the ones which have influenced you). I enjoyed this piece, and I can easily see how it won the contest you entered it in. Congrats on that, and keep writing!
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Review of Medusa's Lament  Open in new Window.
Review by M. Gene McCoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I think you have an interesting premise here, and I am intensely curious as to how this will progress. I've seen stories where Medusa found love after she was found by a blind man/woman, but this is the first and more than likely only one I've encountered where the possible romantic can see. You have an almost fan fiction style approach and style to this piece (not a bad thing, just an observation. Short paragraphs, straightforward approach until you hit your main plot) and it makes me wonder further how you plan on continuing. Keep writing, I'll be checking in on this one.
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Review of Friend  Open in new Window.
Review by M. Gene McCoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Emotional pieces are always the hardest to review. The best way to look at a piece that comes from sadness is to become sad yourself, but this piece does it for you. You give good imagery, and give the reader solid depictions. Last September, one of my friends was murdered. It's a hard thing to get over and truth be told I'm not over it. Things just get easier after a while. You've got talent here, and your emotions didn't dilute it. When things do get easier, though, do try and come back and look at the piece again. You might surprise yourself or gain inspiration.
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Review by M. Gene McCoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
You put magic in this poem. I could feel the love you poured into every word and every syllable. I'm a Georgia native myself, and I actually have a poem I've published on here about my home state called "Song of Home" if you're interested. I thoroughly enjoyed this, and I hope to see more from you. Your rhythm and flow is excellent, and I only encountered one spelling mistake ("Fire flies" should be "fireflies"). Keep it up!
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Review of The Flight  Open in new Window.
Review by M. Gene McCoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Interesting piece. Short, but could go in a few interesting directions. I can see the obvious, that she fell in love with the man who was holding her and had saved her, but I also think that this could be seen as she had died and a force of the afterlife or even something liturgical had reached her. It was a cool read, and I like the fact that I don't know for sure the true meaning of the ending. I like your style, keep it up!
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Review by M. Gene McCoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Actually just kinda pissed myself laughing. This poem is almost as old as I am but the humor holds up remarkably well. Thank you for posting something as creative and fantastic as this, because this honestly just made my night in ways you can't imagine. Keep it up!
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Review of Oblivion  Open in new Window.
Review by M. Gene McCoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
I'm immediately reminded of the band Breaking Benjamin and their typical style of lyrics. I think you'd greatly enjoy them if you don't already. You give good visuals in the opening lines and I feel they're your strongest. Free verse isn't my typical style, and I think this could be improved with some addition of either a meter or scheme (maybe both, dabble some) and maybe it deteriorating as the poem continues. Nice ideas here
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Review of Pen  Open in new Window.
Review by M. Gene McCoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
I have a hard time reviewing poetry like this, but I found this one interesting. I don't know entirely what to make of it, but my initial impressions are that people use pens in different ways. The girl makes people happy, the boy uses it as a lifeline and a double-edged sword, and you used it to carry out and vent your frustration before losing it. It's an interesting idea discussing the people behind the method as opposed to the method itself. I like it.
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Review of We Need Some Funk  Open in new Window.
Review by M. Gene McCoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I absolutely loved this! Your meter and scheme is on point and the message here is absolutely wonderful. Love doesn't come from sitting idle, you have to make love a purpose and a goal. I think everyone could do with a message like this, and plus the read itself was fun too. You have an excellent style. No grammatical mistakes that I can see and nothing I can think to improve upon.
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Review by M. Gene McCoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
You bring up the interesting idea of forgetting people if you don't write them down. I don't know if you're a classically trained writer (I'd venture to guess most people aren't, and even I only partially am), but you may know that Shakespeare oftentimes rendered the women he wrote about immortal and unforgettable to not only him, but to the world. His big tagline in his sonnets was "in these immortal lines", quite literally meaning that they will live forever in his prose. You can observe this with him, Sir Philip Sidney (no recommended, he likes to whine about Stella) and even Poe (recommended wholly with Annabel Lee, Annie, Ligeia). Writing may be a good way to help you or someone else forget someone, but it makes it so that no one else can. Some interesting food for thought. I think I'll be keeping up with you work.
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Review of Soft Shadows  Open in new Window.
Review by M. Gene McCoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
Pretty good. You've got a couple clever rhymes and nice premise. This seems to draw inspiration from experience, so it's hard to really critique. Only grammatical thing I can say is lack of capital letters and punctuation, but that doesn't matter too much in an online format
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Review by M. Gene McCoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is, by far, the best story I've read so far on this site. You took a solid idea and transformed it into something beyond wonderful.

Grammar: Not much to gripe about. Some small mistakes dotted themselves, such as a missing comma (I think one extra as well somewhere). You also missed an important dialogue indentation during Rebecca being questioned.

Observations: You made a wonderful point of Lucifer appearing a short time before death, but I think it could be incredibly more potent if she appeared during the process of dying. When Erin was dying of her illness, if she told Rebecca she'd seen the black angel for that much longer or even said some things to her father about it you would have a vastly deeper story. Amazing piece!
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Review by M. Gene McCoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Interesting concept. My immediate thought run to McCarthy's "The Road" as well as the film "The Book of Eli". The beginning caught my attention due to the opening lines of MLK Jr's speech preceded by the apocalypse. With that alone you could make a master-craft of dystopia/post-apocalyptic. Not sure I understand the symbolism towards the end, but my first thoughts on that are liturgical. I think you have a good idea that needs some fleshing out. Keep it up.
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Review by M. Gene McCoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
I typically only review short stories and essays, but this piece caught my interest. The concept isn't new, but you took a cool approach. I feel like if you expanded and showed a mirror image of the sights the narrator saw while on the pill, it would further the affect. Good poem.
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Review of Severance  Open in new Window.
Review by M. Gene McCoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
This has an interesting and rather unique concept that, I feel, could be taken in a few directions if you chose to expand it. My first thought is that, if he's able to see what occurs through a paranormal perspective, what about the idea of passing onto the next realm? The idea is that spirits longer until they find solace, so how would Trey do that? Just a thought, but this is creative. Keep it up.
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